Badges 25
Moments 9
1yr
Commented who was Liang peng again? just a refresher
ch 946 Third Prince & Two Old Acquaintances
Blood Warlock: Succubus Partner in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · XIETIAN
2yr
Commented See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon
ch 89 Back to the Cerulean Planet
All My Beasts are Legendary
Eastern · Da Yu Is Fat Again
2yr
Commented note for author. this is constructive feedback. you can't have narrative adjustments, it causes confusion and, in writing, it is incorrect. If you chose first person omniscient, you can't change to another individual to be first person. The POV should always be on Cera. I'm saying this as an English major. If you hire a professional editor, they will change those scenes to be purely 3rd person.
Example: COO "slammed his fist on the table"
I should only used by other characters when in dialogue, be that internal or spoken, not in description of actions. Not even Tolkien, R.R. Martin, or Rowlings used this style. Bronte and Dickens didn't either. The set perspectives are First person and third person with addition of omniscient or not. In first person, you choose a person as your perspective, then you don't change it. That's what people are trying to state and it should be taken as constructive feedback, not "get better at English"
As an English major, am I wrong now too? Do I need to get better at English? yI enjoyed your story and dedication, buy that comment lost some respect
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The Ancients World
Games · easyread
3yr
Commented I appreciate the conversation between Eggor and Freya so much. As someone who has done exactly the same as Lino, stood at the edge of the abyss and thought myself weaker for it, thank you author.
Thank you for the easing the feeling of weakness for stepping away from the ledge and not committing to the abyss, instead replacing that feeling with strength for staying around.
Thank you.
ch 46 Chapter 46 - Hearts of Pain
Legend of the Empyrean Blacksmith
Fantasy · beddedOtaku
3yr
Replied to avidanimefan because authors don't do the simple googling. One author probably didn't look up a description for the kobold or gnoll and created his story, then people saw that work, dont have a history of dnd or video games and took it as what a gnoll or kobold looked like, the the cycle propagates. the amount of people who have stated that in Re:Monster the kobolds are dog like is quite many, and that's just one manga
ch 0 6 Fighting Kobolds
The Evolution of a Goblin to the Peak
Fantasy · DonnEll
3yr
Commented authors interchange the two too often and anime/manga authors are the most guilty of it
ch 0 6 Fighting Kobolds
The Evolution of a Goblin to the Peak
Fantasy · DonnEll
3yr
Replied to Good_Hot_Chocolate I meant to respond to you but I just generally replied
ch 251 Lunatics
Mages Are Too OP
Games · Soaring Flames
3yr
Commented Kobold through Germanic lore had three forms, small humanoids, animals, or flame.
Kobold through DnD, practically the go to to describe a fantasy monster, is, even in the infancy of descriptions, described as having dog ear, scales and rat tails. More recent DnD descriptions have been lizard or dragonoid with smaller stature
ch 251 Lunatics
Mages Are Too OP
Games · Soaring Flames
Dundee239
"Some of the informational memories given to us by the Queen are unopened, kinda like an unwrapped package that we can choose to open whenever we're ready to open it. They are neatly labeled too so we know what kind of pandora we're onto. One of the memories I opened is literally about how the same company that makes rotating house appliances that can clean dirt off a clothing, is also the same company who makes a rotating machine that evaporates people by shooting 3,900 rounds of deadly lead traveling faster than the speed of sound, per minute."
My Apocalyptic Rabbit Wife
Fantasy · YokoyokoRPG