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Just because something comes to your mind does not mean you should spill it out for other people to see.

Yeah I feel the same but MC is trying to be a good person and Shido hasn't done anything yet to cross the line. I want MC to crush all his confidence and break him completely.

His mom was home and he thought it was okay to do it in living room?

Bruh I like the fanfic and the premise but you have seriously ruined Minato. He's supposed to be a talented prodigy who learns everything with super fast pace. If you wanted to write about a character who worked hard with mediocre talent to become strong and show his struggle, you should have simply made an OC. That would have been much better. It's weird to see someone like Minato struggle so much for so little improvement. Plus he was thinking about saving Uzumaki clan but with his progress, he's barely keeping up with canon Minato. He will just have higher ceiling than canon Minato because of One Piece power system. That's all.

Right? Even that broken reaction time is nowhere in sight.

You are confusing Shadow clone with Multi Shadow clone, it's multi that's forbidden as it creates far more shadow clones and puts user's mind at risk because of information overload.

The descriptions are a bit too flamboyant. Are you using AI to write it?

Bruh what's up with these white names? Those might suite cloud ninjas but Konoha ninjas have Japanese names predominantly.

Bro she felt insecure because he's so good. It's literally beyond his control. He can't decide what kind of emotions she will have.

I feel like one is going to be Hella. Plus Jean definitely needs to be in Harem. That girl has had a crush on MC for years now.

You wrote about Sara's mom peeking but didn't even write her POV. That was the important part.

It's been showed many times, there's nothing but emptiness after taking revenge. MC just gave him one more chance, if killer still doesn't change and tries to harm somebody then MC will kill him.

Was that ancient one peeking at him?

Yeah it was same with my science teacher. Still vividly remember that scene when she bent down to explain some topic.

Chinese audience or authors don't like Fugaku because they think that he kept giving in to Konoha's excessive demands. Which led to Uchiha clan's destruction. Uchiha clan was at most arrogant, they wouldn't outright kill other ninjas just because they disagreed. They were isolated and monitored 24/7 by Anbu and Root. Obviously they won't feel comfortable.

Pretty much every Chinese fanfic author has problem with Fugaku and Itachi

Demanding a secret technique literally makes no sense and if Konoha decided to hand it over it would be bs. They are actually enemies and are not playing house.

Everything surrounding protagonist is always going to happen by coincidents. This is a plot driven story and not a character driven one.

You can not follow the canon but if even the main cast is not included then what's even the point of choosing HOTD world? It might as well be just any apocalypse world.

Yeah it makes sense.