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Panqiuyan

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I am a college student who likes anime, games, and books. I am writing historical fiction for fun. My goals for the future 1. Get my Master's degree in counseling. 2. Finish writing my book series.

2018-09-13 Joined United Kingdom

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I think you meant to write she instead of he
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I would suggest you put a period after questioning and capitalize the I in if it might be easier to read the paragraph
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need a sperate line for I merely nodded because it sounds like the mc is saying it instead of the police
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this has a lot of commas I would suggest maybe rewrite
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