Zenfree

23d

Replied to Thirty_six_Hours

One word of critique is the multiple points of view. The books focus tends to stray from the MC for too long and too far away. Try experimenting with focusing on the mc's perspective followed by mixing in some third pov that's still centered around the MC. As for other points of view, it's not necessary as it just sounds like a rewrite. It's better to just write everything in 3rd Pov when you want to include others' internal thoughts and such. Aside from that, it would be much more immersive and flowing in the MC's perspective.

ch 58 Chapter 58 Resurrect

Zenfree

23d

Commented

Then just go home. No one is forcing him to fight...

"If it were before, I might have been interested in a fight with you. But after two days of mining, I just want to go back and sleep well with my wife. So, sorry."

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

23d

Replied to Uncertainty

facts

Being in Demonization, August naturally didn't receive any damage, but being punched by his own wife, he couldn't do much about it.

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Commented

BS... He chooses this and then goes on to say he's helpless. Ch 79 a little past mid way his exact words:

Although August felt a bit helpless about this title, there was nothing he could do.

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Commented

king of kings.... Collector

"That's right, Collector. Your ability to store items is already known to many. Although I don't know who leaked the information, it's indeed known."

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Commented

Your partner in an alternate reality is a guy or girl, maybe both or none. The point is they are not your partner, and its an alternate reality. When you think of it like that, you realize this Bell Cranel is a girl and has no association with another Bell except for being an alternate. Just like mc, an alternate could be a girl and talks to Bell (male version).

A naive girl who grew up in a rural area, after experiencing such situations, a small seed was quietly planted in her heart, waiting to germinate and take root in the future.

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Commented

I remember when he kept saying this line over and over again, "...big enough to store all the treasure in the world...😂😂"

"I possess a treasury trove large enough to store all the treasures in the world. The swords just now were taken from the vault and used for the attack."

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Commented

his name: "womanizer" ??? Saying I don't care to a name everyone will be referring to you with doesn't make much sense. Anyways, let's see cause I care.

"I don't really care about the title, as long as it's not too extravagant."

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Replied to zedmoto123

That's not toxic. He is uncomfortable because he doesn't like the way Tione and Tiona are influencing their relationship. So he wants Ais to keep some distance. If Ais disagreed and he tried manipulating her or forcing, then it is indeed toxic. Ais saw no problem with his needs, respected his desire, and agreed. That's a couple communicating. Although you never asked for it, we as humans are affected by others, and you have made me deeply concerned for your romantic relationships. I hope you never enter a toxic relationship and continue to be ignorant about it from a personal experience perspective and knowledgeable about it from doing your own research.

He was the man she chose, the person she would live with for the rest of her life.

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Replied to DaoistDemonEyesKyo

dont let them influence her = keep some distance. They go hand in hand... Your comment makes no sense

He was the man she chose, the person she would live with for the rest of her life.

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Replied to Zailo95

someone convinced your partner to sleep with another person who is interested in your partner. Not wanting to be too overwhelming, he took a step back, and Ais went to comfort lefyia. Now he tells Ais he doesn't like the instigators that caused this situation. Yet he is Chinese mc for that. We as humans sometimes don't like people just based on a vibe, much less a direct influencer in your relationship. Especially the night after your consumation.

"Because I don't like them."

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Replied to Nicola_Bravo

In the end, your chinese... If I called you that because of how I found your comment to not match my opinion, then isn't that ridiculous. I could no longer like you because of this comment. For some, they hate you, others they may want to kill you and other agree or like you. The mc's reaction is relatively normal on the general scale of human behavior. That's a fact for all humans, Chinese or not.

"Because I don't like them."

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Replied to Anitimesc

someone convinced your partner to sleep with another person who is interested in your partner. Not wanting to be too overwhelming, he took a step back, and Ais went to comfort lefyia. Now he tells Ais he doesn't like the instigators that caused this situation. Yet he is Chinese mc for that. We as humans sometimes don't like people just based on a vibe, much less a direct influencer in your relationship. Especially the night after your consumation.

"Because I don't like them."

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

24d

Commented

should have made him consume the water of life and become like Ban... Then, when he utilizes the broken world over time, his immortal physique will nourish and heal the broken world. instead: two items appear that perfectly match each other, even capable of automatically merging....

[Inner World Seed: Absorbed Water of Life to repair itself, a seed capable of birthing a inner world!]

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

25d

Commented

it's not funny. I speak for myself.

Watching Tsubaki approaching step by step, August was in tears. He swore never to break into Tsubaki's mansion again, it was suicidal.

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

25d

Commented

Nonsense.

Ais and Lefiya had been companions for many years, and Ais couldn't bear to see Lefiya so sad, so she agreed to the proposal.

Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon with Gate of Babylon?

Anime & Comics · XElenea

Zenfree

1mth

Commented

Another Superman that doesn't take into consideration the innocebts killed on his exchange? or did the mc realize? or did the mc forget he could have hanmered Hulk up then smacked him towards the sea where there are no civilians?

The horrible impact made it directly penetrate a huge high-rise building, leaving behind a big black hole on it.

Marvel: Spider-Man? No, I'm Superman!

Anime & Comics · iRedX43

Zenfree

1mth

Commented

iron man technically happened, its just the Mc captured him first a day or so ahead of time. Thus HULK would be next plus its a fanfic

And halfway through class, while Peter was enjoying the sunlight with eyes closed, his ears that had super hearing enhancement countless times over suddenly heard a sound that greatly interested him...

Marvel: Spider-Man? No, I'm Superman!

Anime & Comics · iRedX43

Zenfree

1mth

Commented

eay easier to just save, announce and get the points...

"Oh, now I finally understand. Without enough stars, how could it count as chaos on a big enough scale?"

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Anime & Comics · iRedX43

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1mth

Replied to Pororo_Lat

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