Tito_Lasanta - Profile

template novel... mc being blind brings nothing to the story to make it less templated, (he can read, dodge arrowd, see the faces of people, at least he gets felt pity of, when the plot needs it) writing is allright but lacks. the flow in which the whole story is narrated is steady, unemotive. The plot and world seem to be written without much thought. i insist, template novel.

the story looks good but the grammar upsets me :c, also some sudden turns in the naration, like going from he to i in the middle of the naration lowers the seriousness of the work. Some concepts are partialy badly exlplained, but lets say thats part of the story. Author should reread his work a bit more

i like it. .................................................................................................................................

a power trip story. Quite well writen, but IMHO it has to many plot devices: game like stats but with growth by meditation for mc, op teameats, altogh mc has x100 their stats, magic but mc got special magic, to many rules that seem to be molded for mc. Just one of these is enogh to make mc OP. having everything allready on floor 1 out of >100 makes any later power level worthless. it s worse than a my system novels. Secondly mc actitudes (and what little was shown from others to) kinda overlap each other: cautios but battlemanic, doesn t like to kill but smiles when stomping even though it s a masacree. He s cheap with money and then he isn t. really author just wrote whatever the hell he dreamt w/o much though on consistency. kinda mad cause it could have been a good mindless read but oh well got keep looking i m also mad at reading mc is good looking every 10 chapters although it doesn t matter at all in the situation

delivers what it promises. Not the finnest translation though .

funny for now, laughts at it s own genre plotarmor, while slowly becoming itself one with thick plotarmor. Since i enjoy it for now i like the book, but i don t expect to like it to the end.

This may sound harsh, but could you use a autcorrecting software? The story synopsis looks great but the first chapter english grammar made me wonder if you even care about what you write.

Bad, very bad english. Please at least use autocorrector sofware. In the first chapter, that is supposed to catch the reader attention verb conjugation are so messed up. No need to mention confusing frases. Jumped to a random chapter aheed, first sentence already shows bad english. If this was a translation it could be understandable, but the actual author doesn t take care of his own work?