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TaintedMetal

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The Machine fuels my writing. I used to write on Wattpad, you can check it out here: https://www.wattpad.com/user/R4nd_TheLondonBurker

2020-08-01 Joined Global

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A Demon's Ascent

A Demon's Ascent

Fantasy · DemonicAscent

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A Demon's Ascent

A Demon's Ascent

Fantasy · DemonicAscent

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The Ma此

The Ma此

Eastern · Mythwalker

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Might as well write a webnovel about him.
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Tyrants Last wish

Tyrants Last wish

Urban · itssYannii

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Interesting name. Aidoneus. Sounds powerful.
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Tyrants Last wish

Tyrants Last wish

Urban · itssYannii

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Thanks for your review. Appreciate your comments!
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Thanks for your comments! I'm glad you enjoyed the story!
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This is only 4 chapters only, and I do believe it will far be better in the future. So far there is a build up with the scene setting and whatnot. The author can clearly paint the picture via dialogue Unfortunately most of the dialogue felt like it was rushed as well as being the form of a manga without the pictures. The constant "screaming" of characters a.k.a caps locked sentences made it seem like the author's keyboard was smashed. No offense, but it unbearable to read another character screaming their guts out and it was hard to take it seriously if it was done often. World building will take place further one but amp up details on the surroundings. I mean with the GTA and One Punch Man reference does convince me this is Earth but we are going through the world with the protagonist as we read on, so just put more details on the world, maybe twist it on your own. Are there say, other beings that exist but the Strongest Man doesn't know yet? While I appreciate that the author isn't doing an info dump like some other novels I've read on this site, but further insight before the screaming dialogues would be better. Protagonist is thankfully NOT another tragic bullied otaku gamer orphan who gets "the system", so thanks author for that, but I do encourage you use the super elements to make him stand out. Go all out if you have to. Surprise your readers further. I'm not a comedy reader so excuse me if this is meant to be a comedy with the first and second chapters, or not. I couldn't really tell based on the fast paced atmosphere of the characters jumping into dialogue exchange. There's a lot of time and room to improve and sharpen this book further author. You can do better. Good luck.
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So who exactly is this all-powerful, impervious being?

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Fantasy · OneSevenEight

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As the door began to open, I began my usual script.

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Fantasy · OneSevenEight

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