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ursus010: There are all objects of study - one feature, they do not like noisy places, crowds of people, apparently the effect of medical research?

Now they say the future is not the development of technology and even not medicine, but the future belongs to mutant viruses, microbes, they become stronger, medical preparations in the future will not be able to cope with them so quickly.

Only those who have immunity will survive. And it can only be for those who eat healthy food, organic and not chemical.

And in the novel, poor kids have already undergone treatment with various drugs; their immunity is low ... poor.

Thank you, the author, apparently the story promises to be intriguing.

Rainbow of the Horizon—Illuminating Our Darkened Path | Our World · C0
8 months ago

RohHai_3: I like the plots and the world veiw point so far. The realizations and most of the thoughts are great. I like the novel. Thanks.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World · C15
9 months ago

RohHai_3: Just one thing. Maybe you could try to emphasize who is speaking during a conversation.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World · C15
9 months ago

RohHai_3: Sometimes I lost track of who said the thing and to whom.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World · C15
9 months ago

RohHai_3: I hope you continue this novel. Theres always a room for improvement.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World · C15
9 months ago
As far as things go by as I write this reply, NoFutsuu has ended. But there will be a time that I will be back. It's just a matter of decision as to what I'll do next. Nevertheless, thank you very much for your feedback! Really appreciated it. View More

RohHai_3: I hope you continue this novel. Theres always a room for improvement.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World · C15
9 months ago

RohHai_3: But you are one of a kind author. You have a peculiar imagination.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World · C15
9 months ago

Ji_Yidao: Only read about 5 chapters, interesting concept but executed poorly. First person novels are trash and the characters thought process is interesting but hard to follow.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
10 months ago
Lol. I get the zetsu bit quite a lot. XD It's just hilarious when I think about it. View More

Kind_Shadow: Looks like zetsu but very good character development a refreshing read and is quite interesting still wondering when the white zetsu army will attack

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
10 months ago

Kind_Shadow: Looks like zetsu but very good character development a refreshing read and is quite interesting still wondering when the white zetsu army will attack

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
10 months ago

PJCG: Excuse my French. But, this sh!t's deep!

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World · C11
10 months ago

ChessityFlames: I’m amazed as how the title is in Japanese! Waa sugoi ne! 🤗

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World · C5
10 months ago

JC192209Mun: The thing that makes him interesting is his analysis of everything and how he responds

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World · C2
10 months ago

Book_Keeper: Hello, your novel has been reviewed by Virtual Bookshelf.
A review excerpt is as follows:

Technical:

Okay overall. A common mistake was the lack of commas before conjunctions of independent clauses.

Characters:

Gin – Great start to his character building in the prologue. It delved into his mind very nicely, and the following chapters consistently showed his personality. Chapter 7 is another good example of his thoughts, albeit, somewhat drawn out.

The new students – Way too many. If all of them are necessary to the story, then more deeply introduce one of them when they all first appear, have him/her interact with Gin. Later on, introduce the remaining one by one, or at most, two at a time. Chapter 5 introduced Ringo and Shiro in more depth after their initial appearance, but the continuous amount of dialogue made reading sluggish. Either cut back and only include important conversation or which best expresses personality, or add action verbs to the speech—since continuous lines of ****** dialogue/quotes should be done in moderation—as well as gestures and settings to make the conversation more realistic and less tedious. This holds for other chapters with strings of continuous dialogue, too.

Otakus. This is used too much and shouldn’t be the defining point of a character. Go beyond this.

Nani. Again, used too much. A few times is funny.

Plot:

Sound waves, interesting. After the teacher explained this disaster, the proceeding chapters lacked intensity or any apparent development.

POV switches such as in Chapter 6… Especially in first person, if you’re switching POV, clarify who it is before you continue the story. For example, Gin’s POV or Rin’s POV. Additionally, try to limit switches to at most every few chapters. Frequent switches in a single chapter or a couple of chapters is too confusing (especially if the POV is not clarified beforehand) and hurts the reading flow. The only time when POV’s might not be rightly clarified are in mystery stories, but even then, it must be done with caution.

Chapter 8, the story picks up again with new insights on time, world, and MC’s bone regeneration ability. .........(cont.)

The full review:
https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/15/review-normal-in-parenthesis-akagin/

After three chapters, you may request to be assessed again.
Thank you, and the best of luck on your writing endeavors! :)

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
11 months ago

Nightmare_Taichou: Thank you! But in terms of the Sekai vs. Japanese terms, I modelled off their language. In Kanji, they have different readings, Kun'yomi, On'yomi and Nanori. For example, there are two kanji in the MC's name. On'yomi reading: "Yu-ri", Kun'yomi reading: "Tomo-Kotowari", Nanori: "Tooru/Osamu". So that is why in Sekai even though they use the same kanji, some words are pronounced differently to go with the story's premise that even though they are the same, they're still different. Do you get it?

Cross Worlds: The Tale of Two Boys who swapped worlds
11 months ago
Now I understand. Thanks for the clarification. :) View More

AkaGin: I'm simply overjoyed to find a Japanese or anime/manga-ish setting as I don't see them a lot in this portal. I don't usually read fantasy novels but if mixed with the said setting and isekai genre, I got to like this.

The description and elaboration of the world is great and the characters are well-written and described. I've seen and read the kind of story elsewhere but it never gets old and new concepts are being established.

But there are some things that did not sit well, like the concept where Sekai terms are generally Japanese terms even though MC ought to be able to understand it since he himself is Japanese.

With all that said, Cross Worlds is a great story and I'll be sure to continue reading the novel. Keep up the good work! :)

Cross Worlds: The Tale of Two Boys who swapped worlds
11 months ago
Reading Status: C6
I'm simply overjoyed to find a Japanese or anime/manga-ish setting as I don't see them a lot in this portal. I don't usually read fantasy novels but if mixed with the said setting and isekai genre, I got to like this.

The description and elaboration of the world is great and the characters are well-written and described. I've seen and read the kind of story elsewhere but it never gets old and new concepts are being established.

But there are some things that did not sit well, like the concept where Sekai terms are generally Japanese terms even though MC ought to be able to understand it since he himself is Japanese.

With all that said, Cross Worlds is a great story and I'll be sure to continue reading the novel. Keep up the good work! :) View More
Cross Worlds: The Tale of Two Boys who swapped worlds
11 months ago
His character came out as a trope as I decided the premise of the novel more than a year ago when all was still on a whim; but I found Webnovel, thankfully.

I can at least think that there might be changes to him in the future and I try to incorporate more of the characters.

I got the inspiration of writing this since I'm a big fan of slice of life because of their nigh similarity to reality. I still can't find myself writing other genres as it would look meh at this moment. Therefore I try to improve. :) View More

Nightmare_Taichou: This novel is...different from what I'm used to.

The writing quality is fine, there may be a few sentences where words could be swapped with another for better fluency, but that's the least.

The stability of updates seem to okay, but I can't comment on that as it is now.

The character design for me, Gin was it? He seems like an MC from one of those slice of life anime. But was this deliberate? Since the nature of your novel seems to highlight Gin, a boy who (correct me if I'm wrong) thinks he's normal but in comparison to everyone else, he's really not?

Furthermore, this novel felt like a seinen mixed with slice of life manga in novel form. Overall, this novel is pretty deep, considering it deals with finding purpose and consciousness(?) which gives it the seinen feel I mentioned earlier.

The beginning was a little dry for me, maybe it's because I steer clear from first person POV novels, but if it's deliberate given the nature of Gin, then it's understandable.

Still, I hope this doesn't stop you from writing. It's interesting, just not my type.

But Good luck with it!

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
11 months ago

Nightmare_Taichou: This novel is...different from what I'm used to.

The writing quality is fine, there may be a few sentences where words could be swapped with another for better fluency, but that's the least.

The stability of updates seem to okay, but I can't comment on that as it is now.

The character design for me, Gin was it? He seems like an MC from one of those slice of life anime. But was this deliberate? Since the nature of your novel seems to highlight Gin, a boy who (correct me if I'm wrong) thinks he's normal but in comparison to everyone else, he's really not?

Furthermore, this novel felt like a seinen mixed with slice of life manga in novel form. Overall, this novel is pretty deep, considering it deals with finding purpose and consciousness(?) which gives it the seinen feel I mentioned earlier.

The beginning was a little dry for me, maybe it's because I steer clear from first person POV novels, but if it's deliberate given the nature of Gin, then it's understandable.

Still, I hope this doesn't stop you from writing. It's interesting, just not my type.

But Good luck with it!

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
11 months ago
Loved the comedy in this chapter XD View More
Cross Worlds: The Tale of Two Boys who swapped worlds · C3
11 months ago
Finally found a ligh novel-ish setting! This first chapter is amazing! View More
Cross Worlds: The Tale of Two Boys who swapped worlds · C1
12 months ago

ChessityFlames: I think overall the book is great but there is room for improvement such as grammar. I do enjoy the occasional funny moments and I like the use of Japanese names as I am an anime fanatic. The starting can be a little confusing and dry but as I continued reading, it moved on to the character and it is great that you’ve added background information regarding Gin such as the place he lives in. Continue writing and good luck! Do not let any negative comments or review stop you from writing.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
12 months ago
Reading Status: C5
I like how the setting showed the depth of the context through descriptions and narrations. There were some grammatical errors and I feel like punctuations are needed in few places. Character development is also pretty good. View More
Rise of Destruction
12 months ago

Apophis9: Good writing quality, very different from the other novels, which makes it interesting to people who have this kind of genre taste :") keep it up with the good work man :)

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
1 year ago
I've gotten the inspiration from pretty much watching anime and reading manga. But then I discovered and read light novels and decided to write my first work. Thank you for the review! View More

Jamison_C: The book felt like an anime in novel form.

Can see the author making efforts to establish his premise.

Fans of classroom settings etc may find this suited to their tastes.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
1 year ago

Jamison_C: The book felt like an anime in novel form.

Can see the author making efforts to establish his premise.

Fans of classroom settings etc may find this suited to their tastes.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
1 year ago
Yes! Still updating with the followed schedule! :) View More

MishaK: Very different from what I’ve read in the past few days. That’s one of the reasons why I have liked this book. Keep on updating and I look forward to more updates.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
1 year ago

MishaK: Very different from what I’ve read in the past few days. That’s one of the reasons why I have liked this book. Keep on updating and I look forward to more updates.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
1 year ago
Reading Status: C6
The writing quality is great. I like the introduction and the flow of the story. It also reflects to the reality in this world relating to the theme. View More
The Inconvenient Wife
1 year ago
Thank you for the honest review. I will strive to improve my writing in the future. :) View More

ValentinaKhan: I expected a “life changing event” and instead I received a chapter long stream of consciousness about some esoteric crap that goes on inside the mind of the narrator/protagonist.

You should keep in mind that readers have the attention span of a golden fish. If in your first page you don’t answer some ****** questions as “What’s the story about? Who’s this guy? What’s happening to him? Why should I care?”, the reader will close your book once and forever.

Normal in Parenthesis—The Old Will and the Dawn to All | Our World
1 year ago
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