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Paragon of Destruction · C314
DarkDaoist: MC is reincarnate person we don't know who that is or which age he actually comes from, standing up for himself is good but then author takes a huge smelly dump on the entire series by making all the original characters appearing to be self-centered, lazy, idiotic and manipulating.
Hagrid a guy who can wrestle with trolls and fight death eaters is shown as superstitious and don't want to take care of harry anymore because he can speak parsletongue from the beginning, Snape is shown as self-centered, Minerva as lazy, Dumbledore as a manipulator and many other changes for other characters.
MC comes out as psychotic power hungry who uses children as lab rats to train his magic (and kills them too later redacted by author) and steals just cause he can. Wants to be a loner and shuts everyone out arrogantly and claims no one ever did nice things for him. He lives a self-fulfilling prophecy life where he is a loner and a possible end villain by behaving like arrogant young masters from xianxiaNew Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
H_Alex: In my first review I gave this novel 5 stars. Now I gave it 3. The main reason is author's blind, puppy affection to Hermione, which is shown as recidivist traitor.
"Genious" businessman selling stuff for a dirt-chip price to a small community. Breaking the logic of how hard it is to make a permanent charm. Repetitive plot with Hermione's betrayal anf MC's forgiveness. Doing things without considering the effect. MC using the guilt trip card every time(let's be honest, he didn't suffer, real Harry did).
All this things and many others slowly but steadily turned me away from this, in other cases good novel. That's just sad.New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
CZ2128_Delta: writing quality is superb but that is all, I have read until chapter 36 the latest chapter before I did this review. All I can say is that the story is so messed up that it is not logical anymore, since the mc transmigated to the body of Harry and he have already know of the plot why be so edgelord on all the people around him?New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
noobageddon_: Lame 😒
The beginning is good then comes hermoine.
Well hermoine is not the ‘main’ problem if you think it clearly, but its the mc for making just a stupid choice. Also hes always saying he will not forget... well if you take it literally he really will not forget the mistakes he made, but not learning from it is not the same as not forgetting.New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
Chibi_Senpai: Honestly I still really don’t know what I expected from this novel and what kind of mc the author truly wanted to create. Maybe he’s just trying to please the readers and I truly wish the best but I can finally see this novel is really not for me.
I don’t even remember what made me pick up this novel but I thought it’d be a dark/cold/pragmatic Harry novel. I honestly liked the beginning but things kind of took a downward turn when Hermione was introduced. I still remember the moment something popped up in the back of my mind that I wasn’t going to be able to binge read a hundred chapters. It was when Harry hugged Hermione and got addicted to the warmth. From them I knew it was a wrap and the cool headed stable logical mc was in danger.
Despite the fact that he’d known her less than a year and she was 11 years old, the mc proceeded to get dangerously attached to Hermione even though their ideals couldn’t be more conflicting. I’d originally applauded his decision to groom her into his subordinate as she truly was a gifted witch but I wonder where it went so wrong as the author seemed to heighten his emotions for her when it was obvious how dangerously stupid falling for a little girl was. He taught her and revealed to her a majority of his secrets while her loyalty was never certain. It’s like he deluded himself into thinking it was a sure thing they were going to spend their lives together. Meanwhile she’s just eleven, fickle and easily able to be turned against him.
I don’t know, I blame reader’s obsession with seeing an mc with empathy, ‘human’ emotions, and showing genuine care for those close to him. Maybe it’s just a difference of preference but I disliked how irrational, delusional and emotionally invested he became when it had to do with Hermione. It sometimes felt like the author was inhabiting the mc and was very enamored with Hermione/Emma Watson. I won’t deny it, I can somewhat understand where he’s coming from as I dealt with the same challenges when writing myself but I made sure to separate myself from the mc and try not to show favoritism to a specific female character.
Hermione was originally meant to be a pawn but ended up owning the mc’s very fragile heart and unstable mind. It’s disheartening honestly and a primary reason why I’m dropping this novel. I wanted a cool headed mc who got things done and wasn’t controlled by his dxck or emotions. I’m not really a fan of overly emotional protagonists so I’m just gonna get off the ride while I can after reading 35 chapters. Reading other reviews showed me things don’t really change in future chapters since the author is dead set on Hermione even though their personalities directly clash. And instead of the mc corrupting and subordinating her, she’s ended up doing his head in. He acted irrationally by revealing to her all his secrets and I doubt he’s ever going to really take back control of the relationship. It’s too much angst for a bunch of 11 year olds to be dealing with.
Thus the mc and the story has just turned me off it. No hard feelings, wish the novel the best. I’m out.New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
guilhermecoimbra: 1) The writting quality is good for this platform and it is the story's saving grace, but also means it is average if this work was published in a developed platform.
2) The updates are constant and rigorous, I give props for the author commitment with his readers.
3) For whatever reason, I think the author is "milking" the story, halting the main plot progression and filiing the story with some tinkering in the Hp world, like creating a company, magical experiments and etc., the latters aren't a problem on itself, but the balance between the main plot progression and them. In suffice, if this was a paid novel and not a fanfiction I bet people would be talking about fillers and word count, things that authors do to drag the story for extend periods of time. I have no idea how things work on pa.treon.
3.1) If the tags "slow pace"; "Business management" were here I'd be less miffed about it.
3.2) For reference, HP and the sorcerer stone have little less than 77.000 words. This story still are in the first year of Hogwarts with 114 chapters (approximately 1,5k words per chapter according with author's estimation). Besides, Rowling did the world building from scratch, author have a sandbox.
4) Initially, the character development was one of the things responsible for the story's initial momentum and, ironically, author - in his notes - pointed out some inconsistencies with Rowling's original characters's profiles, but then he ended up creating some of their own.
Let me explain:
4.1) Harry is a trasmigated OC, he has something that people with depression and anger issues strives for: a third view perspective of the situation, in a way for them not take things too personally and affect their mental health. The character internalized this problems so much - abuse, child endangerment - that he end up appearing as an unstable sociopath.
4.2) Hermione. I don't what's the author wants with the character. I suppose that he idolize her so much that no matter what she does against the MC and creates a circus drama, the consequences are a mere afterthought by the author with a meaninless development, in a way she'll always remain as main female character. Furthermore, the circle repeats just to stir the readers I think.
That's my review up to chapter 114.New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
BigDaddy447: At first, it was about M.C and reading this novel was really fun.
Then the author added a little romance, which is necessary in a good novel.
Now, it's about Hermione and only about her, but with a little politics here and there. Author over-explains everything about Hermione on every new chapter and about what Harry thinks about her every little action, like every little sneeze, every little sentence and it's very annoying.
There was action in this novel in the beginning, there was adventure and exploring new magic and presenting the world in a different way.
But now it's just some nonsense every chapter that I highly doubt anyone actually reads. Well I just skip most of it..New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
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Paragon of Destruction · C276
Just_A_Bored_Otaku: No proper story or content, all you did was simply take up the minor plots from the book and keep playing the emotional card, playing the injured kid while simply put the char never actually went through any ****. Thank you for royally messing up this story.New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
Qin_lin: The main character is a complete idiot who draws so much attention to themselves acts intentionally anti social drives people away and than act as if he’s constantly lonely. WTF is the point of even considering bringing a gun in to a fantasy novel when the main character is already starting to be an over powered genius. The fact the mc doesn’t give a **** is cool but what does it amount to him beating up a few people and suddenly having a relationship with Hermione. GUNS DONT BELONG IN HARRY POTTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
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Ferus1: So far I have enjoyed this story greatly its funny and very engaging.
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IzziLoren: I like it a lot. Great relationships with the characters. I also like that the protagonist is still very child-like despite the second life. Nice setting-up for the plot. Has good flow.Rebirth in a Magical World
hhhhz45: I hope you will continue to write this story and not just drop it. I like the fact that the mc is older than harry is because it gives a different perspective to the whole plot. Him(mc) not being able to read the 7th book is a nice idea beacuse he will not be able to distrupt the cannon. I hope you will not make the progagonist overpowered by stupid means(students after 7 years at hogwarts are not so powerful magician, i dont think even voldemort would be powerful enough to take an good auror in a 1v1) You shoul take into considiration the abilities of wizards from FBAWTFD 2 movies beacause the portray what a wizard is capeable of better than the origional story. My suggestions are to show through this story a magical world not seen with the books(its really narrowly portrayed) but that u still stay into "logical" boundaries of what jk envisioned, also i hope you dont make him the triwizard tournament champ or some "good" slytherin.Rebirth in a Magical World
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DevilsArray: The writing is good, the backstory is nice. The flow of plot is going smooth, I hope you have a road map prepared on how you could proceed. As an reader I sincerely hope you are not obsessed with the golden trio and interact with all the same though the trio may get more time but don't let go of others. If possible bring salvation to kreacher, dobby. Save tonks, Lupin, sirus, George, Amelia and others if possible.Rebirth in a Magical World · C1
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New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic · C7
MIC_LUBIJAR: The MC in Harry's body is not a likeable person at all. The formatting of chapters is bad. Its difficult to read. The character development is the worst. You didn't even include good reason for MC for being this way. And most of all the liberal use of magic without being detected. If it was that easy, then most muggleborn would be frighteningly powerful. The most ridiculous thing was MC mastering legilimens as if it was easy. The whole story feels like you are ranting about problems in Harry Potter series. Throwing tantrums.New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
Greatergod: Can you translate that to English???? because most people who give one star give an explanation as to why they give one star. But dude....you seem to have written your explanation in the ....universal language.dropped, dropped
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