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Eslyna

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2019-01-11 Joined United States

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Eslyna
10mth
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I dropped this, but before I go into my long rant, let me say what was good. The setting was phenomenal, and I love the writing style for the MC and his mom's comments. They were the most notable lines and quotes for this novel. The system wasn't bland either, and their was an interesting premise to go off and build towards. Now, I had big hopes on this novel but it started to die down around the Shu Ling dinner event, and even more on the event after which was... sleeping with his mom... Although some people would love this... I really hated this and was a third of the reason for me dropping. But after this it started being amazing again, and then yet again, dropped in quality around when they apartment girl's scene with the antagonist and MC. It was a roller coaster of amazing subpar amazing subpar. Despite the great writing quality, the plot direction and especially the characters are not so much. The first and current main antagonist of the chapters I read up to (C39), the antagonist is too retarded and 2D, purposely made overly stupid to make people hate him, but due to this, it was more annoying than anything else. The harem is also much too huge, there are 12 heroines, and a mom, and a system, and a stolen wife whose existence evaporated to thin air. However... there seems to be EVEN MORE heroines as there will be more protagonists... each with their own harems... it is way too much, and the part I got to already has signs of self destruct most harem novels have. A big deficient on this novel is the character development and plot holes. Their personalities and stuff usually take a complete 180 and auto loyalty et cetera... it is too much... unrealistic and too fake/rushed. The Character development for the side girls was kinda thrown out the window. There were also plot twists, which were nice, but there was too many in a short period of time... and this was bad. A direction for the main plot should be chosen sooner and not randomly changed every few chapters. It started to seem the author also started mish mashing ideas such as I Am the Heavenly Destined Villain's system of luck Plundering system update plot twist. Although this was just all from my opinions, so you may like it still past what I read. I read a lot of books... so I am pretty picky. For the things I noted I'm the novel it is likely too late to fix everything, and frankly might be better not to fix at this point, but don't drop the novel. I am however excited for your future novel you may write (hopefully) when you finish this one, and also improved from your experiences and things you noted that you liked and disliked about this novel.
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Replied to Sameer_Prasad_9872
I'm sorry to break your idealism, but I am afraid most girls lose their virginity before 16 in the west while in the east is below 18-20ish. So good luck finding a pretty pure virgin girl
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