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Reading Status: C21
Hello, your novel has been reviewed by Virtual Bookshelf.
A review excerpt is as follows:

Technical:

Okay overall. A common mistake was the lack of commas before conjunctions of independent clauses.

Characters:

Gin – Great start to his character building in the prologue. It delved into his mind very nicely, and the following chapters consistently showed his personality. Chapter 7 is another good example of his thoughts, albeit, somewhat drawn out.

The new students – Way too many. If all of them are necessary to the story, then more deeply introduce one of them when they all first appear, have him/her interact with Gin. Later on, introduce the remaining one by one, or at most, two at a time. Chapter 5 introduced Ringo and Shiro in more depth after their initial appearance, but the continuous amount of dialogue made reading sluggish. Either cut back and only include important conversation or which best expresses personality, or add action verbs to the speech—since continuous lines of ****** dialogue/quotes should be done in moderation—as well as gestures and settings to make the conversation more realistic and less tedious. This holds for other chapters with strings of continuous dialogue, too.

Otakus. This is used too much and shouldn’t be the defining point of a character. Go beyond this.

Nani. Again, used too much. A few times is funny.

Plot:

Sound waves, interesting. After the teacher explained this disaster, the proceeding chapters lacked intensity or any apparent development.

POV switches such as in Chapter 6… Especially in first person, if you’re switching POV, clarify who it is before you continue the story. For example, Gin’s POV or Rin’s POV. Additionally, try to limit switches to at most every few chapters. Frequent switches in a single chapter or a couple of chapters is too confusing (especially if the POV is not clarified beforehand) and hurts the reading flow. The only time when POV’s might not be rightly clarified are in mystery stories, but even then, it must be done with caution.

Chapter 8, the story picks up again with new insights on time, world, and MC’s bone regeneration ability. .........(cont.)

The full review:
https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/15/review-normal-in-parenthesis-akagin/

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Normal in Parenthesis
1 day ago
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Something that shouldn't happen · C10
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Love of Mafia Boss · C6
1 day ago
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The Archer's Hunt · C3
1 day ago
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Cross Worlds: The Tale of Two Boys who swapped worlds · C11
1 day ago
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Karana · C2
1 day ago
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Legend of the Empyrean Blacksmith · C179
1 day ago

Pgimz: Thank you. Will take all this into consideration as I continue.

She Knew She Loved Him
1 day ago

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Godking Ascending the Heavens · C72
2 days ago

Lord_of_Potatoes: Forgive me, my phone autocorrected Book Keeper into something weird

Godking Ascending the Heavens · C72
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Omniscient Reader · C150
2 days ago
Reading Status: C54
Hello, your novel has been reviewed by Virtual Bookshelf.
A review excerpt is as follows:

Technical:

Overall, it’s good. There’re some typos that can easily fixed with proofreading. One awkward phrasing, “get the crème de la crème of him,” I’m assuming this means “get the best of him,” if so, “crème de la crème” isn’t the right phrasing to replace “best.” The former is a noun trying to replace an adjective, so this would be incorrect. “Crème de la crème” is more literally, the best person or thing, so using it in this context would awkwardly mean, “get the best of the best of him,” which has a different meaning. Also, this different use of language doesn’t fit in with the rest of how the story is mainly written.

Characters:

Introductions are short but satisfactory as long as more of their personality shines through later events.

Realistically, it seems off that she’s so preoccupied with the new neighbor to even dream of said person as a puppy. What is realistic is that even after Alex saw Zunnie several times, he didn’t go crazy love at first sight must chase down this woman.

Alex has a bit more personality, and his character is slightly more realistic than Zunnie, at least. The choice of Little Thing seems somewhat derogatory as I doubt women would want to be called that by their lover.

The other characters follow the typical tropes of *******, jealous girl or rival, kind family member, friend, etc. .........(cont.)

The full review: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/12/review-she-knew-she-loved-him-pgimz/

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She Knew She Loved Him
3 days ago
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The Dream Team · C1
3 days ago
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The painter · C1
3 days ago
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Coming of the virtual world · C4
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Coming of the virtual world · C1
3 days ago
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BEST ENEMY, WORST LOVER · C9
3 days ago
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Conquer · C94
3 days ago
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strive towards the unknown · C5
3 days ago
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A Billion Dollar Exchange · C0
3 days ago
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Fallen Immortal Son: Rebirth in the World of Magic; A Cultivating Mage. · C30
3 days ago
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Legend of the Gunslinger Mage · C64
3 days ago
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Godking Ascending the Heavens · C72
3 days ago

Kimmyah: Thank you! I didn't expect this hahaha

Limerence · C23
5 days ago
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Second Chance War · C51
5 days ago

littlehera: Thank you! I wasn't expecting this. Many thanks and I'll do my best. :)

Children of Elisium
6 days ago
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Queen of Performing Arts · C3
6 days ago
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The Threadmistress and the Teddy Bear · C10
6 days ago
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I Just Want To Live My Life: Flower and You · C91
6 days ago
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Monarch of Heaven's Wrath · C107
6 days ago
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