Firebowle

11mth

Commented

Pls just switch the picture back … it looks like every throwaway harem novel 🤦‍♂️🥴😂

ch 58 Chunin Exam Part 8

Firebowle

1yr

Commented

I can recommend Marvel: Re-Do, it is about a Mc who awakens the Lutent ability to adapt and evolve, see if you can maybe find inspiration in it or for the readers, I can recommend it 👍

And while we're thinking of questions, I got one for you guys. See all fanfictions have some bad ass character with op abilities, like lightning manipulation, fire, darkness, light. But I've never seen anyone do something as simple as Physical adaptation, The ability to grow stronger and evolve past your current strengths. Kind of like Darwin's abilities from the X-men. But instead of gaining new powers, your body just grows. From being a baseline human, to peak, to beyond. It's a simple ability, like say you get shot and when you heal, your skin is denser and can withstand multiple bullets before it begins to do real damage. Or say when you punch something, and it breaks your hand. When your hand heals it can withstand the previous force that broke it.

Marvel: Son of Poseidon

Anime & Comics · TrapcardD

Firebowle

1yr

Commented

I could imagine that

1. A pair of short axes

Naruto: Root Ninja

Anime & Comics · komega

Firebowle

2yr

Commented

I think the goal and journey are missing, you either concentrate on the goal or the journey and character development. On the other hand As your story is now I don’ t see much difficulties that are long term, only some short term like the attack of his teammates but no complications. You have the perfect villain in Danzo or a hidden orgamization of mercenaries or something like that. But as of now your character is just simply existing and not creating in an already existing story. My Tip: Be bold, change what you want to change and let him live a life of difficulties Fun and Creative writing ✍️

ch 48 Not a Chapter

Naruto: Root Ninja

Anime & Comics · komega

Firebowle

2yr

Commented

I like your passion of youth😂

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Naruto: The Template System

Anime & Comics · Navy_King

Firebowle

2yr

Commented

How about „I am Krillin“, I think it was quite good. Nice chapter👍

ch 13 A mission with Nick fucking Fury

Marvel; Werewolf System

Movies · arekuruutento

Firebowle

2yr

Replied to The_Young_Flash

Well I prefer a movie or novel, where choices are described but not explained. Just show the reader the emotiona let them be part of the story and not seperate them by trying to explain the reasoning of the character. I don‘t know the novel, but felt disturbed by the tipps left behind for the author to stumble over. And a further tip, try to incorporate a hidden story, something that is there in one centence but is never explained, but adds depth to the world/characters and so on. Do your beat, author.

Marvel: Meditation System

Anime & Comics · Alcoholic_Panda

Firebowle

2yr

Commented

My disappointment is immeasurable and my day is ruined

Sigh... The anger and disappointment in me is immense... And the worst thing is that the fanfic didn't have any revisions warning the readers... Urg!

Savage: The Night Wizard - (A Harry Potter Fanfic)

Book&Literature · Se7en

Firebowle

2yr

Commented

For my taste, his reactions are a bit artificial and the dialoge is missing completely. You just advance the plot, but dont care about writing his character and enhancing the story. The story in its enterity feels a bit soulles, good idea but to focused ob the plot. But the idea is worthy to put in a fanfic

ch 0 1 Rebirth and Quirk Awakening

MHA : True Power of Telekinesis

Anime & Comics · Omega200

Firebowle

2yr

Commented

For my taste, his reactions are a bit artificial and the dialoge is missing completely. You just advance the plot, but dont care about writing his character and enhancing the story. The story in its enterity feels a bit soulles, good idea but to focused ob the plot. But the idea is worthy to put in a fanfic

ch 0 1 Rebirth and Quirk Awakening

MHA : True Power of Telekinesis

Anime & Comics · Omega200

Firebowle

2yr

Commented

+1

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HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]

Book&Literature · FictionOnlyReader

Firebowle

2yr

Commented

Ill tell you something. Little movements like shaking your legs etc are goong a long way in maintaining a coloric defecit. Just try to move as much as possible even while sitting and you are feeling much more motivated to do the big things

Hopefully, I'll lose the weight within 3 months and start building muscle.

Ultimate Earthbender (Dropped)

Anime & Comics · TheTwoTwo

Firebowle

2yr

Commented

Wonderful thanks for writing such a beautiful story full of inspiration and creativity. Thanks and good luck in your further developement as a writer.

ch 52 The Child of Prophecy !

What is real peace ?

Anime & Comics · Neadeath

Firebowle

2yr

Replied to Okkkkkk

These arent gravity szones, just planets with higher mass and thus greater gravity

Kayn smiled in satisfaction and looked at the interface of his space pod. The displayed show the planet's Gravity Zones, Hard to Breathe Zones, and the Polluted Zone! This place had been scouted before, so they had some information on the planet.