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What they did? Author, being ambiguous in the narrative of your character like this makes us wonder why she feels the need to repay her parents for doing what was expected of them by bringing her into existence in the first place. Unless they’re not her real parents🤔🤔?

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Fantasy · FallenBlue

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3yr

Commented

I think that it might sound better to say “-to be made use of- to the fullest.” But thats just me! You dont have to change it author! Its Hard work wRiting!!

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Fantasy · FallenBlue

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3yr

Commented

Lol i take it back. It doesnt matter shes entertaining to read about. shes like a train wreck

'My life is pretty generic and boring, but since I'm sure I'm a good person, I should be quite welcomed above, right?'

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Fantasy · FallenBlue

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3yr

Commented

Why is her inner narration so strange? She sounds deranged. (And not quite clever.)

'Of course, newly deceased people are poor. Our families have yet to offer paper money to us.' She inwardly giggled.

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Fantasy · FallenBlue

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3yr

Replied to SkyHighLimits

Like, I wanna study her you know? Write up a ten page dissertation on this wench.😂🤣 You did a really great job creating this character. She’s a creepy, masochistic fangirl, but you gave her enough nuance to make us believe that if we stuck in long enough, she would eventually act like she held a single braincell. She’s compelling.

However! It was adorable! And a big achievement because he wasn't one to smile a lot.

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Urban · SkyHighLimits

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3yr

Replied to _eunwa

I’m honestly only reading to get to a bad end for this nasty fan girl

I never felt such severe fear like that before.

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Urban · SkyHighLimits

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3yr

Commented

This mc is honestly so pathetic. It’s impressive that as an author you’ve upheld such consistency with her original character introduction. This Mc was the sort of girl who can explain away her affection for an abusive character by framing her affection as just so called appreciation for a so called “Intricate background.” When really, they’re just a bunch of smarmy, self entitled, unstable serial killers in the making with a pretty face. From her narrative, this mc explained how she liked them just because of that. They werent real. But more than that, they were attractive, and it stoked her own ego to imagine that she could hold the attention of such a thing. I like how you portray her hypocrisy in her interactions with the characters around her. How in her spoken narrative, she seems off putted, angry, frightened, but then when it comes down to choosing her own safety or continuing to hold their attention- She always, always backs down in submission and somehow, as an author, you manage to give her a sense of smug satisfaction right afterwards. Seriously impressive. She’s one heck of a fan girl I’ll give you that. A yandere herself in the making how she manages to fool herself into believing she’s doing her best in trying to escape the men who would confine and abuse her if possible.

However! It was adorable! And a big achievement because he wasn't one to smile a lot.

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Urban · SkyHighLimits

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3yr

Commented

Oh please. You know you love it otherwise why do you persist in indulging these psychos🙄🙄

Ah, you're so annoying!

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Urban · SkyHighLimits

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3yr

Replied to Ihartme123

But you forget that the author introduced this character as a quivering m in denial. Worst yet, this mc has her delusions of grandeur validated by being transmigrated into an otome game, where she can live her power fantasy of ; ‘Transforming the bad boy w/ my good girl heart~~’

Fuck, you know what? There's no solid way to escape everything! In that case, I'll just stick with Ryuu! As I said before, he's the only one who could end up with a decent future! I'll just have to endure a bit, but I'll live. Maybe I can even start early and explain to him why it's wrong, unlike the actual MC who just accepted it.

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Urban · SkyHighLimits

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3yr

Commented

So GO to the fuxking police wHen he does try to assault you. I mean, the japanese police are notoriously ineffectual though, so i can understand your misgivings, but at least have it on record somewhere right?! And considering that Ryu had a ****ty scum for a father, even if his mother had battered wife sydrome and never reported him, I refuse to believe that such a violent man hasnt assaulted someone he couldnt gas light into not reporting him. Japanese society loves to blame the kids for the parents mistakes, fucking take advantage if it and stOp trying to act like you’re above them.

If Ryuu gets rejected, he will beat me everyday. He gets the idea after being rejected that if his mom had only been persistent and didn't let dad go, he wouldn't have left. Thus, he puts that into practice. He also doesn't mind if he's hated. As long as the MC never forgets him and pays attention to him, he's even willing to be hated. Ryuu prevents the MC from telling any authorities with threats.