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mc name is arthur pendragon vaner eldername novel cultivation novel with system tell me novel name pls?? thanks for the awsm fanfic liked it much more than other one piece fics

simply amazing...you put so much effort in the novel ...nd really I have read all kind of novels everywhere ...but this one is simply amazing you have just place everything we need in mc... just perfect role for mc nd just as the perfect narrated... thanks for the beautiful story...

sorry but I don't understand a thing haha still I know author must have put a lot effort in writing the story so 5 star for that ...but yeah I don't understand a thing like what's the story about or what's going on in the story...

well you have got nice concept but I can't say you are describing the story according to it...there are so many mistakes in just this few chp.. the no of points differs so much and you explaining the stuff to much...just read the other cultivation novel as reference or something... I just giving advice cause bro u r writing the story with quite the effort there don't just write it like that ... one more point pls keep the no in status steady don't make it inconsistent... nd keep techniques name same don't change it by chapters...

storyline and writing quality is nice but it's boring ...yup boring to the point that I drop after 30 chapters... nothing interesting in this novel...why u say because it's just statics ... I come here to read refreshing novels with different ideas and some exciting stuff...not to find myself reading some struggling mc...haha there will be no fun reading if mc keeps struggling even after he is stronger.... so I will drop this novel because it's not in line of interest...not cause of writing is bad or anything... and buddy we r here for realising stress not accumulate it haha...

seriously if u want to get irritated than go ahead and read it... no second thought on this😒 mc is so annoying... directly proportional to test your brain power ...

plot is nice and the world background is decent but the execution of the is poor... there little to no conversation... nothing like any emotional moment... yeah you can not find any moments like that... not even angry or happy or any as you can think of... mc directly get into relationship...without even any developments... too many flows... yeah too many...

agreed

over all nice start... but it seem like u don't have plot or ideas wht to write 😑 cause in one chptr u only include a little to nothing...like last one I read mc pick up the herb and than u introduce a two char which was out of flow a bit nd there is no excitement in reading ch like this...or any anticipation... so I suggest u should chech other novels or take reference frm it...there is one novel..my diciple all are villain...

so u should make least bit different like 13 year old I m not saying u should have *** with her or start relationship but u should have little bit feeling like nice feeling that any human have...and I will say it again now he is 13 man u and I both know no matter what age he was previously but now that he is again young there should even little change man just he find it outright annoying is annoying for us reader for too right

yeah now he is not 70+ buddy he is 13....

nd pls don't make mc like this one of the fact is this no men would dislike attention given by ladies so just stop that yeah ... u don't like that u r handsome nd the girl u just met is attracted to u so u find it annoying yeah stop bullshittin.... yeah even with age 70 anyone would like it so stop describing it like mc is some kind of hypocrite yeah he like girls so how come it feels annoying when some girl is attracted to u...🤣

men why r u wasting ur telent like this author.....u have writing skills nd still whts up with this 30+ chps with just info dumps.... and that slow progress....your describing is very nice but dude u just post 30 chaps just to for this .... --} mc is in fantasy word cause of goddess which gave him system yeah ok..than he goes through forest to town nd he met some noble retired soldier family in which there's two brats...men u just use 30 just for this nd wht abt lasts 3 chaps it's like u just describe only the one skill or ablilty how points are used or wht is mc class lol we knew that already... well even with low IQ level can think of restrictions of the skills so pls don't decribe it like for 3 chaps... it's like when I open my library nd see tht whoaa there's 3 chaps updated nd when read through it wht I got is just description of the ability that I already know nd understand...man I don't know laguh or cry... pls stp wasting describing everything...u could have just surmise this 30 chaps into 5 or 6 but don't drag it...u have skills so don't waste it to draging it will drp the quality of the novel...

I like this one ...it's the best fresh one out here.... Nd pls have a request keep the reality in the like u r doin now...it's fine to that mc have power nd stuff but keep it like real nd most likely logical... Nd one suggestion to I would like since u have started a new from the start which is way better than old one ..so in this new don't just focus on one girl like I see in every novel now n then in heram which is that there's always a girl which important than other in mc eyes...which is disturbing...so pls don't make that mistake nd let the girls be unique without pointing to any importance...give the reasonable screening to every girl ...beacuse there are so many examples in every novel I read that authers just forget abt some girls nd most of them are the milfs one like 35+ ones they got in relation have *** nd after that they just won't mention them or just metion them at rendomly ...it's annoying seriously..so pls if u can don't do that... don't skip the some daily life moment with them...cause then it will feel realistic...