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You should wire this in English !!!!!!!!!

I say stop where you are and re-edit what you already have, it is very hard read and understand right now and you’re using the wrong label and us is making it confusing. You should also stay with one name for your character instead of switching it every sentence.

The thing is good like really good but it focused to much on the others instead of the main character

This is very there’s no doubt about that but it is very confusing to read and sometime makes not sense with all the errors in the sentences and story line, some gender are mix up and some character aren’t even the right power level think about it would someone that has a sprit with a rank of 20 when it first awaken really have trouble with some weak 20,000 year old sprit beast and where are her guards