Badges 6
Moments 123
7mth
Commented Man you are writing this like soap opera, like just progress the plot... we will all turn old till karna reach adulthood.... if you don't understand what good pace means then here... good pace = sufficient amount of things should happen in a single chapter.Pace doesn't mean more chapters.
ch 146 144. Epiphany
I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.
Fantasy · ForManaga
8mth
Commented Interesting. Will there will other mytholgies in it or it's just a purely mahabharata fanfic? And will you create OCs for harem?
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8mth
Commented Nice. Just make it happen fast and keep it swift.[img=strong]But wait was kaaliya sent by kansa?
(A/N : You guys wanted action right? Here is your action, I bet no one expected Kansa's entry.
I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.
Fantasy · ForManaga
8mth
Replied to ForManaga As you said there are too many characters in MB like Kansa but is he important to Karna's story? Like Krishna and Kansa has their own thing going on and so I think that you won't be having to spend considerable time on him. Similarly you can skip a lot of characters.You introducing those 4 girls and the fox was super interesting, and I can see they are going to be big part of Karna's story in future.Any suggestion if I can give is not to drag an arc for too long. Avoid filler content, a chapter should have content instead of just words. You can plan and spread out arcs properly. A short timeskip of even two years will make us readers feel like that plot is progressing.And time and words given to a character should be proportional to the impact of the character on karna. Put more focus on main cast and less on side ones, as I'm pretty sure main cast is going to be big because of harem.Though it's just my personal opinion, you should do a QnA chapter to see what your readers feel so you can plan the plot better. Otherwise good luck.
ch 108 107. Mother Knows Best
I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.
Fantasy · ForManaga
8mth
Commented Speed up the story bro... otherwise I'm seeing another 200 chapters before he grows up...
Like I appreciate and respect your dedication to have written so many chapters, most can't do that, but we are crawling like a snail. Like I don't even feel like voting with PS now since it's dragging so much.
Your update frequency is amazing, at least a chapter per day. Too good. It's just those chapters are not taking plot forward with right pace, too slow.
Don't take it wrong away I just really like the concept and want you to do better.
ch 108 107. Mother Knows Best
I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.
Fantasy · ForManaga
9mth
Commented Please increase the pace. Very little happens in every chapter.
ch 93 93. Twist Of Words
I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.
Fantasy · ForManaga
9mth
Commented Instead of likes of durvasa, drona or parshuram... how about a goddess from some other mythology?
(A/N : Again who do you think Karna's first teacher would be?
I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.
Fantasy · ForManaga
1yr
Commented Jean Grey, Scarlet Witch, Wonder Woman
What women should become his slaves?
Predator Through The Multiverse
Movies · Untold_Truth
1yr
Commented Chapters are quite short. Try to shoot for 2k words, it's OK to have less chapters.
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1yr
Commented Interesting. Who are the love interests BTW?
ch 0 3 A Dragon has appeared
Omniversal Trade Center
Anime & Comics · Student_Of_Culture
1yr
Commented Riser was an arrogant playboy and here he feels like an OC. I mean story is good but kinda lacking because of this.
I know some of you don't like cowardly MCs, but trust me this is just for a character development. Riser is currently still in the early stages, so it's still vulnerable when fighting protagonists with high combat power like Issei.
My Inner Voice Heard By Heroines
Anime & Comics · DogLickerGods
1yr
Commented What about harem or romance?
ch 0 1 1. The Start
MCU : The Seventh Avenger
Movies · Lust_Demon_Samael
1yr
Commented Athena?
[ Born from a headache has joined the group.]
Chat group of gods:Traveling through mythologies(Paused for eternity)
Fantasy · Arch_Tysonoo
The story is good and can keep your attention while reading it. Enough mystery is there too. Characters are fun especially Adi and Amara. Update stability is great too.
I would look to suggest author to write character's physical appearance more vividly. I still don't know how Amara looks or if she's Indian or foreigner from that name. Or maybe I just missed reading that part?
Anyway keep it up author.
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KamaDeva
ch 0 5 Talk with Grandpa
Fairy Goddess System
Fantasy · Mountain_Yogi