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I've read up to the current non-premium chapter - 49. If these things change past this, then take the review with a grain of salt.The writing.The writing itself has a decent flow most of the time. There is good imagery at times, but often it feels like it's being overdone to appease certain types of people. There are a decent amount of issues when it comes to typos, repeated words and misspellings. Not that it feels like a translated novel or anything like that, just that it's clear that either it needs to be reviewed an extra time or two before publishing, or to be reviewed at all. I do not believe the author to be making these mistakes because they lack in skill. Even with all of that, the story is written quite well, and I can say honestly that it is above most books on this platform by a landslide.The world and characters.The world is amazing. I love the idea of a post-apocalyptic world trying to scavenge the pre-apocalyptic world of usable tech and resources. The cryptid idea is cool and has so so much potential. Of course it still has flaws in it's design and they're very apparent, but it's easy to immerse in the world itself and forget about them momentarily. The biggest flaw is that there are nearby towns and cities that have clear markings of being scavenged, raided and looted - but they still have things like plastic. Plastic was depicted as being incredibly important to the economy and yet there was heaps of trash containing plastic. I do not believe for a second that they could get to an area so full of loot without making an even more distant and dangerous journey. There is also the military. Sure large bodies of powerful people gather cryptids, but by that logic powerful people could not ever gather as they would attract monstrous titans. Cities supposedly stop this because of the concrete being good energy mufflers. So if that were the case, then powerful military units would cover vehicles in concrete, cities would be amazing for powerful humans which isn't the case in the story. Instead they cannot hide together in a concrete building because of the supposed attraction of cryptids.There are other issues with the world, but with how interesting everything is, it is easy to forgive. The characters themselves stay in character for the most part, but there are certain times where their reactions do not make sense for how the world was portrayed. It started off seemingly serious and dark, but has turned into some weird lust comedy. Every woman is the most beautiful woman with the most... ugh.. it's incredibly repetitive and cringe. Also, for the incredible intelligence Urial is supposed to have, he sure has 0 foresight. He knew about the military taking people to get traits, but somehow never thought of getting a job to fund this. Never thought of getting a job to fund any part of his supposed poor life, never thought of making his own life easier by getting disposable income. Nearly every college student in real life thinks about getting a job so they can survive the day, especially if they don't come from well off families. There are more character flaws that don't make sense, but up until chapter 49, they were passable and didn't completely ruin my time reading the story. Though I did have to do a double take when he said that Luna wouldn't be interested in going to the secret excursion. That was the most out of character thing Urial would have said, and it also made zero sense. In fact it's the whole reason I am writing this review.To sum it all up, it's a great story with incredible potential. The characters for the most part feel different and fun. There is always some sort of mystery around the corner to lure you into reading more - which is wonderful! Please continue writing and improving. I believe you can do it, and you have shown lots of potential in the interesting world you have created.
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How would she not be interested?? She's literally trying to get as much info as possible about any and every cryptid... That's just stupid

"It's fine, I don't think she would have been interested in coming anyway. So, what was that about the fountain of youth?"

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