Wackle

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2yr

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One thing I have found nagging on this story, and I'm not targeting the author about, the grammar has to improve. My brain cells refuse to move past the first chapter, but acknowledges that there is a decent plot and a promising future developement. The Character has the same run-of-the-mill start, he dies and gets isekai'd. Though when I read something I need a clean story with punctuation and great update times. Other than that I could see this story blossom in the future.

Wackle

3yr

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In the bottom of this paragraph the “found” should be a “find” it annoys english teachers and me...

Milo was both shocked and stirred up by what was happening. His competitive spirit is being aroused. Although he knows that their level is different, looking at such beautiful moves, he wishes to be part of it. Milo founds an opening, he jumps high and does a karate kick...