Webnovel Author: HANA_4345 - Novel Collection

Great! Maybe you should put a small note on one of your chapters to clear that. Just so that your readers know its not like you forgot about it, but that it's all planned.

So... as I always do in my reviews I like to pinpoint the strong parts of it first. There's definitely good character design and story development. Just a small suggestion, not really something that you need to follow through if you don't want to. You should develop a bit more your world background. Is our MC on Earth? How come there are 9 worlds? Is this an AU? Why did our MC's father fought monsters? There are a lot of questions with no answers. A bit of detail about all this will make the story better. Also as a bonus point, it will make your reader have a better idea of what to imagine when reading your story. So, what you must improve so your story can be a success. 1. Capital letters. I saw that proper names lacked capital letters. The beginning of paragraphs lacked capital letters. Even your title lacked capital letters (don't know if that last one is intentional though). Just by editing that, your story will look more polished. 2. If you are unsure of your grammar you may use a writing software like Microsoft Word, or just download Grammarly and use it on Chrome. Both work well for writers who are just starting. Hope this review was helpful, and I hope that I didn't sound too harsh.