ryfulrifle - Profile

nono! its just me being picky on my preferences. though I'm not sure what about your previous edit, I much prefer "blocks" of text. It helps me immerse and get in the flow better. for some paragraphs tho, (subjectively) its too abrupt and takes away from the scene, like an awkward or delayed cut in a film. But I don't even think there's even a set guidelines on paragraph spacing; nothing to quit over especially when you're doing so well!

Minor spoilers below. A blend of light novel light-hearted and comfiness with the usual system trope that is sure to give you a good laugh. Classic-isekai and pretty generic in the world-building, though I'm sure it's because the author doesn't have enough chapters to develop it even further (which also goes for the characters). I love the job-class twist... the strongest system is a shepherd. I can't help but imagine a herd of goats marching into a dungeon xD The pacing is great, really captures the slice of life-light novel isekai feel. Paragraphs and dialogue flow smoothly, but some scenes transitions feel a little abrupt (in the timeskips and status windows) but that's just me being nitpicky. Speaking of which, I'd like just a tad more description, especially regarding William's surroundings. I also felt that the goddess selection scene was dragged for a bit. All in all, the writing and general direction the story is headed towards is great. I've high hopes geared to some power-fanasty adventures and I'm sure you'll feel the same after reading. The goat Mama Ella is the GOAT. Keep up the good work author and good luck in Spirity! (**: I went into this expecting Eylon's degeneracy--err, that is his exceptional cultured tastes, and after reading I can assure you it's very well there :) Loli goddess, harem, goats, shamelessness and potential lewd scenes, you name it, Elyon delivers. (Double **: Do not lewd the goat, or have thoughts on lewding the goat.)