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mediocre story which reads like a reddit fanfic. the main character is an obvious self insert, and every other character is a one dementional pawn who is either fully subservient to him or becomes a 'bad guy' out of a children's book.the writing style is beyond cringe and the lack of any depth in the story after 150 chapters is mind numbing. I stopped reading when the author started having people get horny over his 12 year old self insert character. Not worth the read in the slightest

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This story is totally uninspired and not worth reading in my opinion. I read the first 60 chapters and so far it's all been incredibly generic. The chapters are short, the characters are one dimentional and have no depth, the plot only exists to serve the main character. The author is writjng 2 books at once and publishing 4 chapters a day and it shows in the writing. entire chapters of this book can be summed up in 1 line and everything is so drawn out for no reason. you just can't write a proper story if you're forcing 4 chapters a day.

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2yr

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Really great chapter so far, but this seemed a bit cliche with the 0's and 1's literally showing up :P

Suddenly, numbers-zeroes and ones appeared in front of me, combined with texts that I do not understand. Gradually, my body moved on its own, wanting to retreat towards the castle without bringing my sister.

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Fantasy · kuhaku_sora

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2yr

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Never Normal starts off really strongly with lots of mystery and intrigue. The main character, Breta is thrown right into a hostage situation and the plot makes you want to keep reading on to learn more about the story. The writing has been quite good, although there have been errors it hasn't hurt my ability to tell what's going on so far, and I've been able to really enjoy the dialogue so far. If I were to give one improvement it would be to add more to the synopsis, as right now it's short and doesn't quite let the reader know what to expect from Never Normal. Keep it up!

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2yr

Replied to Acylith

Thanks! I can't believe I never spotted those in all the proofreads.

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