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it's a good story the horror and thrilled in the first paragraph, jut little grammar mistakes like in the first line "I hated the color red because it was a color that hunters my dreams" this is going in the past tense like she hates red color in the past, not in the present, it should be more like this. "I hate red because it's a color that hunters my dreams" and the other line should be like this "then my eyes drifters around I found my best friend Tara's body nailed on the wall or rather what left of her"
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The DEVIL'S darling

The DEVIL'S darling

Fantasy · Misumi

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