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i think a rewirte with a slower pace is in the cards you gave him too much to fast. i do not mind the friut but maybe save it for the 2nd world it feels to powerful for the first world. another thing since RWBY is a world of fairy tales brothers grim way you could easily fit kitusa (cant spell) one so he can fit in better and it can be a fannis only tale.

this felt a little out of the blue

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I get the feeling madison was going to be a one time char that ended yep staying around

when is the next chaper?

i think a rewirte will help but in the end it is up to you and what you want to do as the wirter of the story

she wants to change it from 2 player chess to 3 player chess

yes

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