Webnovel Author: HaruHaru24 - Novel Collection

HaruHaru24

2yr

Posted

Hello everyone! I've been working on this story about 5 years now and been improving it time to time, I've publish this story on another platform but it was in my mother language, it's my first time to write a novel in english, honestly, i'm not really confident with my english, and it basically feels like my first time again on writing a story. I hope everyone can leave a critic, suggestion, & some honest review to improve either my grammar or my way to express the character and story. Thank you!

HaruHaru24

2yr

Commented

this is honestly relatable ....

I nudged the door open with my foot, holding a big box of my belongings. Looking at my box to make sure I still had everything inside, I took a few steps forward. Thinking about how my boss spoke to me before firing me, I felt the tears threatening to burst from my eyes.

#RoomLife

Urban · hidingpanduh

HaruHaru24

2yr

Posted

what an impressive work, I have not finished all of the chapter but, truthfully the writing was so good, it was clean and easy to understand, the MC is really smart, waiting for his another character development in the future! The concept of the story were good, it's about MMORPG and since I'm currently obsessed with MMORPG as well, the early chapter were so relatable, keep the good work!

MMORPG : Rise of the Interstellar God

Games · Hamapo

HaruHaru24

2yr

Posted

The writer did a good work on expressing the character feeling, even the start were so heartbreaking! this story has a big potential, would be better if the writer fix the punctuation of the story! overall it was good!

This book has no chapters read Will Fate Bring Us Together

Urban · Rayne_Rue

HaruHaru24

2yr

Commented

sometime u need to see someone who are in front of u girl! but you were still blinded by love, it's okay, take ur time girl, and notice how there's a better man in front of you!

" I know Jay but it's hard for me not to " I shout then burst out in tears.

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Urban · Rayne_Rue

HaruHaru24

2yr

Commented

now look at this man hehehe

All he had to say was "he knew nothing about it and he was sorry I had to find out in a way that I did " he sighs and adds on by saying would stick by my side and even stop being friends with Emir.

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Urban · Rayne_Rue

HaruHaru24

2yr

Commented

it's okay girl! there's a lot of man out there, it's just you're still blinded by that scumbag!

I wonder what will happen to me in the future, will I be able to find love and happiness again, will I be able to move on again?

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Urban · Rayne_Rue

HaruHaru24

2yr

Commented

forget him! he didn't deserve all of your affection!

It's been 3 months after the incident and I can't believe everything that happened, I mean "am I supposed to "?. Doing things we used to do are now inscribed memories.

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Urban · Rayne_Rue

HaruHaru24

2yr

Commented

throw the souvenir away girl! you deserve better than a scumbag like him!

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Urban · Rayne_Rue

HaruHaru24

2yr

Commented

did she kicked him? if she hadn't let me do it!

Love gets trampled on and hopelessly melts away, all my relationships ended this way and I thought this one would be it, but this wasn't it until I found out Emir was proposing to someone else, I couldn't surmise it but this was right in front of my eyes, I needed answers to why he would message me and want me to see all that was in front of me. How horrible could this man be, He wasn't the guy I dated 5 years ago could this be his way of getting me out of his way? Looking at the way he puts the ring on her finger tells me he loves her back.

This book has no chapters read Will Fate Bring Us Together

Urban · Rayne_Rue

HaruHaru24

2yr

Commented

Love the metaphor! it was a great start! would be perfect if the punctuation were in the right place

Sometimes the reality you are facing seems unrealistic like right now as I'm walking the streets covered with white after unexpected snow .it's the same when you are in love it feels like you have become the most special person in the whole universe, it feels so unrealistic and yet so real your heart flutters.