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Just a proud queer and poc who likes to write. Pfp made by SOHBlue Balu#7172

2020-07-30 Joined United States

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So this is my first omegaverse story but I'm very familiar with the bl genre. I'm a fan of it and the omegaverse is a really interesting trope that I've always wanted to get into. Things I liked: Characters! Wonho seems like a really intelligent person with a good head on his shoulders. His friends seem pretty interesting as well. I like how his social circle is very diverse and has a few alphas as his friends despite being an omega. Events. Like, woah! I don't wanna spoil anything but that one scene was really intense! I really liked the scene where Wonho's friends are helping him after the traumatic event. That shows how much they care for him and I'm a huge fan of healthy friendships. Those don't occur too often in romance stories, unfortunately. World building. I'm aware of what alphas, betas, and omegas are, however, deltas are a completely new thing to me. I've heard about how society in omegaverse treats each secondary gender. Therefore, I think the author is very on point with how people treat Wonho after he's labeled as an omega. Minwoo. So far, I like this guy. He's done some things, like refused to drug Wonho, that really surprised me. The synopsis made me assume that he was going to be one of those unsavory male love interests who manipulates and forces the protagonist to do things that they don't want to simply because the love interest has some sort of power (wealth, status, etc.) and good looks. I see lots of character development possibilities for this man. However, I just wish he was introduced into the story sooner. Things I disliked: Deltas. This group is considered to be either disabled or psychopaths/sociopaths simply because they are the product of two betas. I personally am not a fan of this type of characterization where a group is antagonized like that. That's just my personal opinion. Grammar and Punctuation. The author uses apostrophes for dialogue instead of quotes. The grammar isn't the best but it's not terrible. Overall, I really enjoyed this story so far. Keep writing, author! [img=recommend]
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I've read a couple of chapters and this story is interesting so far. The prologue was pretty intense and I like how the author described the president. I feel like the author incorporated their personal views on politics and how the politicians can be very questionable. For the characters, I originally thought that Hitomi was gonna be a cliched "I'm not like other girls" girl but she's not. Instead, she admires her best friend, Minako, even though she is the complete opposite of her. She mentions that people view Minako as promiscuous but Hitomi doesn't seem to think any less of her friend, which is a good thing since it shows that Hitomi is not super judgmental towards what other people do with their own bodies. I also like how the author described the Smiths. It feels like the author is taking from their own experience of what Mormon families in the US are like. I liked how the author described Hitomi's experience in the US and how the change impacted her. I thought it was very appropriate for the author to include Bible quotes at the beginning of each chapter since this is a story that involves angels. Now for the negatives. Mainly just poor grammar. I thought it was a little weird when the author started describing the MC's posterior and chest. However, it then related to Western beauty standards and Hitomi's self image. In that case, it was kinda relevant. But then the author mentioned that people who are muscular and very sweaty are "Totally worth it", which I thought was weird. Overall, this story is pretty interesting!
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Making my way down town, walking fast, faces pass as I'm home bound

Making my way through the town, my excitement had gotten the better of me. It's been ages since I was able to smell the fresh air of the town outside!

Winter's Storm

Winter's Storm

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Nice!

"You're right sister, Duke Anthony shouldn't have to choose," I said and she smiled as though expecting that answer. "…so, he has to go with me, don't you agree?" I questioned her innocently as her eyes widened in surprise.

Winter's Storm

Winter's Storm

Fantasy · RamataMaguiraga

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I've read 6 chapters and the story is pretty interesting so far! First, the positives. I liked the fact that the author included the time, date, and location at the beginning of each chapter. It makes the story feel like a crime show where the date and locations are displayed at the beginning of every scene. I also liked the fact that there was some representation for Southeast Asian people (author mentions that Carmela seems to be Indian), which is something that I don't see much of in many popular stories. The author describes the surroundings really well and with lots of details. The action in the first chapter was very graphic and the author also incorporates really nice foreshadowing in the second chapter. The ******* between Carmela and Katrina was pretty intense and well written and felt like a soap opera. Next, neutral stuff. Not a fan of Margo due to her homophobia, the fact that's she's really intrusive about Carmela's life, she seems very spoiled, and her overall bad attitude. I'm guessing that she is one of the main antagonists that the audience is supposed to hate. Author, if that was your goal, then you did a great job! Now for the negatives. There's a bunch of grammatical errors and I had an issue with the design of two of the characters. As a member of the LGBTQ community, I feel like Mina's character could've been written better. So far, he's the only gay character in this story and he feels just like a huge stereotype. The author constantly points out the fact that he's gay, which is great and all, but it feels like that's his only personality trait. I don't believe the author had any bad intentions with this character but I just think that part could've been done better. Along with that, Zoey's character doesn't have much depth either. The author constantly brings up the fact that she is rude and has a bad attitude, yet only shows it in chapter one. Zoey herself is very aware of it, yet doesn't seem to do anything to change it. The author constantly brings up Zoey's nasty attitude as if that is her only personality trait. Both Mina and Zoey feel very one-dimensional while Carmela's character had a lot of depth. I felt that was kinda weird since they are the MC's best friends. Overall, this story was pretty good! I really enjoyed the plot so far.
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Why is Carmela hiding that from her best friends? Why is Xyrelle hiding that from his own sister?
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Girlfriend as in friend who's a girl or girlfriend as in romantic partner?
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Starting to feel more like Margo is looking for someone to be her mom rather than a personal assistant
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I've read 3 chapters so far and this story is alright. I like the idea of a MC who goes from despising the love interest to loving them (enemies to lovers trope). However, there were a few things that I didn't like about this story. My biggest issue was the bad grammar. It took me out of the story constantly. I understood the MC's childhood trauma (I experienced similar situations growing up) but it wasn't really something I would view as a good excuse for her hatred towards men. However, this could be a good starting point for some major character development for Sophie. I didn't like the MC too much but I hated Kayara and Anna a lot. I felt that those two were horrible people. Kayara and Anna both knew about Sophie's trauma but decided to use it against her in their prank. Sophie deserves better friends! Overall, this story was alright and I'm looking forward to reading more!
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