Webnovel Author: Inkbank - Novel Collection

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I have only read up to chapter three and I can tell that the story has great potential. I love the story idea and how it flowed from him being in the coffee shop with his stepbrother and stepsister in-law to his death. I'm not entirely sure where I stand with the pacing and that may be due to descriptions I suppose.In terms of description, it was quite alright but I feel like a little more needs to be done to allow readers to immerse themselves deeper into the world and character emotions you're creating with your story. From Austin's story in the prologue, it is easy to sympathize with him but just on a surface level. A little more description and readers will have a deeper emotional connection with him just from the early stages. Most of his story was told in several short sentences that did not allow a build up of feelings/emotions attached to it. This will also make the pacing seem less rushed. In chapter two; instead of splitting his physical actions into short sentences, all of that could be combined into a paragraph where his actions have a flow. Overall, you did a great job and I look forward to reading more.

I think the story starts of strongly. The use of words in the first paragraph easily set the scene for me (and most likely other readers) to be immersed in the world Valerie has found herself in. I find your use of words to be captivating— you do have a way of playing around with words which makes you a genius. Moving on to the story itself, Valerie finds herself in a strange place and doesn't remember where she is. She is very much aware of her strange surroundings and sort of feels a connection, then she is having a conversation with the Alpha who tells her that the moonlight will reveal the truth, and that her destiny is somewhat intertwined with theirs. Now, while all that was portrayed beautifully, I feel like it was lacking a bit in emotions.Valerie is in a strange place and doesn't remember anything and the only emotional conflict within her is a "where am I" dialogue and when she spoke to the Alpha telling him that she did not remember anything about herself. In all of that, I feel like there's no detailed insight on how she truly feels. It's all vague and most of it is embedded in a dialogue which does not show the emotions. It only tells.Also I noticed that at some point there is a switch from Valerie's first person's POV to a third person's POV. Like chapter one is 1st person's POV, chapter two in 3rd person and chapter 3 is in 1st person. It's advisable to stick to one as it makes the reading flow easier.The last thing I'll like to point out is the (do I call it an explanation?) at the end of some chapters. For example, in chapter two (starting from the third to the last paragraph)In the gripping climax of bound by moonlight, The werewolf...I am not exactly sure why the three paragraph review/explanation/recap was put there (maybe you have your reason for it— perhaps the plot is a bit complex and some might struggle to understand) but I think it's unnecessary because the chapter is still fresh in your readers mind. Instead, let them unravel that by themselves as they continue to read further.You have done well so far! Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more.

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Thank you so much for the extensive review. I really appreciate.By the way, I now update the book everyday!

I just started reading and I can't help but say I am very pleased with how intense the emotions are in the first chapter. the character portrayal and development is 10/10. It was so sa show Emily called her mom to talk about what her husband did and she was shunned. That hurt me deeply. I look forward to reading more chapters.

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