Webnovel Author: Illusionniste - Novel Collection

A story with an interesting story arc with a dark and depressing undertone in it. Jason is an interesting protagonist to read, his backstory was dark and compelling but he kinda gave me that ‘guy-who-always-gets-the-ladies’ vibes. Jason has a personality, which some writers tend to forget to add. Alina took me a while to like, it’s probably because I found her POV a bit cliché but like Jason, she has personality and quirks. I’m actually curious if this is Harem or not, I lost count re-checking the tags just to see if it was a harem. The side characters were decent, I like how Michelle has a great personality, and usually, some writers ignore the side characters and don’t even bother making them real and relatable. I love the world-building, the writer took the time to make the story tangible and real. It was exciting and it made me want to ask for more. I was curious how the world works and I love every minute of it. The story does feel like a manuscript (especially reading Alina’s POV), it felt like I was reading a script. There were more dialogues than paragraphs. There were some parts it kind of feel like cheesy but I didn’t mind at all. The story is full of flashbacks, it sucks that Webnovel doesn’t have formatting styles here because I got confused when suddenly I’m reading a backstory without any warning. Some chapters were short, so it kind of threw me off, the story does have that ‘anime’ ambiance to it. I could visualize some scenes especially when it comes to reading Jason’s POV, which I’m totally happy about it since my mind usually takes a while to see the story. I love your cover! But I’m a graphic designer 𝐚𝐧𝐝 a font hoe. I couldn’t help myself but suggest, using a serif font because it makes the cover more elegant, serious, and formal. Condensed serif font would work. If you want I could suggest some fonts to use. Overall, this story is worth reading especially, if the reader is into anime and urban fantasy with immersive story arc.

This story has an interesting story arc but it needs more. I love the story arc the writer has going on, I could tell it was going to be an adventure reading it, it was making me curious and want to read it. It has potential. The plot summary was short but it lured me in. There are a few hiccups in grammar like sentence case, the 'were' became ‘we’re’… the usual stuff. Which I knew most writers struggle with, as I have too. The story needs more paragraphs, add the protagonist’s thoughts and feelings. So the readers would end up liking him and know him well. Give the characters personalities, quirks, and mannerisms because the characters ended up sounding lacking (but not too much lacking though). Convey the protagonist’s feelings like rubbing his temples, his fists clenched in anger, something like that. As they said, actions speak louder than words. Add a filler scene, a relatable scene. Relatable scenes make the readers love the protagonist. I’m not used to having stuff like *pant* in the story, I do suggest on making it paragraph form, it would make the story more detailed oriented. I do suggest giving a brief description of the characters so the reader could visualize the character. In story development, everything was happening too fast, it became discombobulated to me. Add a few paragraphs, short or not, as long as the readers don’t get confused with the story. Don’t rush the story. Take time to set the scene, this makes the story more tangible and real to the readers. The world-building needs more work, even with short paragraphs that could suffice. Overall, like I said it was potential, it was a compelling story arc but it needs work.

Hi, sweetie. Thank you for your candor and kind words, I appreciate it so much. I'm happy that you enjoyed my story. ♡

I love how this story is compelling to me, I thoroughly enjoyed it. The bird spanking had me 🤣 First chapter was already great, it had me hooked for more. It already tells me how the story would be like. The characters had personalities that I so love about it. It made them real to the readers. Kalani was an interesting character to read, he made me like him and the whole reason why it took for me to write this review because I was too absorbed with the story. How could I forget Whistle. That bird is everything. Whistle is perfect. We all need a bird like Whistle. (This is lowkey a review about how majestic Whistle is) World building was decent, I could imagine some places, others took a while for me to picture it. I do suggest taking time to expand the world building. So the whole story is tangible to the readers. I didn’t notice any grammatical errors because I was too busy enjoying the story. As person who loves details, this story had small amount of details but I couldn’t careless because the story arc makes up for it. This story had that lure for me, it made me entranced with the story and I love it. It had me wanting for more. The story arc is riveting with characters that made me like them. Especially, Whistle.

Thank you! I appreciate the honesty of your review, sweetie. ♡ The sex scenes were actually written last year and I never gotten a chance to review it again. Last year me was into pure total smut without plot that's why it sounded like a porn, I just copy pasted it to this chapter but I already had drafts with less porn feeling and more sensual scenes with the male lead. 🤣

A story with fascinating story arc and great character development. I love how the writer put enough details in the story, it makes the story tangible and real. It wasn’t too much and it wasn’t lacking. The story was a compelling read that I didn’t notice that I was reading almost to chapter 10. It was a great quick read for me. The characters were intriguing, each has their own personalities but it took me a while to connect with them nevertheless, I love the male and female lead. I kinda felt like I was reading a webtoon or something and I don’t mind it all! I love how the characters conversed well with each other. It felt normal and real. Story development works seamlessly and I don’t have any complaints about it. I like how the writer took time to develop the story and how the character’s grow. I suggest adding POV headers in the chapters. Since I got a bit confuse with the pov in some chapters. World building was decent, I could imagine the settings very well which I didn’t expect it to be that good to be honest, but hey, the writer subverted my expectations. Overall, I enjoyed this quick read and I don’t have much to say but keep writing!

A decent quick read with a compelling story idea. The plot summary needs work, make it enticing and intriguing so it pulls the readers more. Give the readers a tease, tease them into reading the story and adding it to their library. It’s like click bait. There were a few grammatical errors like the writer tends to switch grammatical tense from past tense to present tense, which was normal because English was not the writer’s native language. The sentence case was adequate. As much as I love details, this story needs to explain it more properly. It felt lacking in explanation. Like explain how the ranking works in a more precise way so the readers could understand it. The writer did explained some topics but it needs more elaboration. World building needs work, describe the settings to make it more real. Take the time to set the scene. It makes the setting and the story feel more tangible. This goes also for the story development. The story development was sufficient, the story progresses without rushing too much but still managed to keep the story entertaining. In story wise, it is interesting especially when I recently noticed that reincarnation, soul switching and stuff like that seemed to be a trope here in this site. The story has a different approach to it, as it more focused on the protagonist growth and not the romance element, which was new to me but I did saw the tag of Harem. Usually, in the introduction the love interest is immediately introduced but in here, the writer decided to focus to the protagonist and the world building. Which I love about it. Keep up the good work!

Aww, thank you. ♡ That means a lot. Haha. Don’t worry, I put a lot of details in my story too. You’re not alone. Looking forward to the story btw.

So, I don’t usually read horror genre because I couldn’t connect well to the genre. Heck, there were scenes where I was just smiling, especially the frogs part. 🤦🏻‍♀️ I couldn’t get a grasp on the character arc of the protagonist, other besides he burned down his own house because of the blood. Maybe it was because the story was still new with six chapters out. But the protagonist intrigues me because he left me curious about him, especially on how his mind works. But in order to understand the story, the readers who tend to skim (which I made the horrible mistake to do it and ended up being confused about the story), they had to really read it in order to understand it. I don’t know why but when I was in the middle of the story, I suddenly thought of Shutter Island—the Scorsese movie. It had that certain 𝘫𝘦 𝘯𝘦 𝘴𝘢𝘪𝘴 𝘲𝘶𝘰𝘪 feeling to it. I do suggest spacing the paragraphs, especially when it comes to details. I love love love the details the writer gave, I’m a sucker for that. Details helps the story become real to the readers. The writer didn’t overload the chapter with too much details. (Heck, I tend to overdo my story details.) The writing quality was great, if there was any grammatical errors I didn’t see it because my mind was too busy on understanding the story. The chapters were short though, I know I mentioned it already in the other review but I had to say it here also. 😂 The world building was okay, it took me a while to imagine the settings but it was there. But I do suggest on trying to expand the world building. I love how the writer ends most of the chapter with a question. It was refreshing for me to see that in a story. It not might be my cup of tea but I did thoroughly enjoyed reading this.