incarnadine

Hi, author, the first thing I loved about this novel was its concept. The strings, interconnecting based on different types of loves, really was incredible. Although there are some grammar mistakes, the concept was fantastic, and the characters were presented nicely. Hats off to you~

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incarnadine

3yr

Posted

surprisingly, I feel Leon's personality and thoughts relatable, and I think you developed him very well! some errors here and there, but the descriptions and character development were on point, and I'm looking forward to your future updates!

Apotheosis.

Fantasy · GrotesqueIce

incarnadine

3yr

Commented

perhaps 'felt,' instead of 'feels' since it's past tense? :))

He feels the suffocation due to the huge amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere. Suddenly thrown into confusion, his mind was in a constant state of panic. His eyes were blurry as his eyes were teary due to the pain he was feeling. He saw his left hand bloodied as he touched the side of his head when he was thrown outside through the windscreen of the car due to the force of the collision. Pieces of glass shards was everywhere as he looked around in fear and agony.

Apotheosis.

Fantasy · GrotesqueIce

incarnadine

3yr

Posted

I was only able to read up to the paid ones, but it really tugged at my heartstrings~ the vivid portrayal of grief and family, was incredibly emotional; impeccable writing, really. Just some minor errors here and there, but hats off to you, author!

Surrender to Grief

Urban · Glenstonx

incarnadine

3yr

Posted

A few grammar errors, but I really enjoyed the story! What with the vivid descriptions, the setting, and the nicely constructed world background, it was an incredibly enjoyable novel~ good luck on your next updates~

Multi-Gene

Sci-fi · Typhlix

incarnadine

3yr

Commented

There's also Baronet, below baron, but baronets typically have this status of a commoner, and thus, aren't really nobles.

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Retiring as an Incompetent Queen

Fantasy · incarnadine

incarnadine

3yr

Commented

pronounced 'uh-lev-yar'

Elevyar.

Retiring as an Incompetent Queen

Fantasy · incarnadine

incarnadine

3yr

Commented

To clarify, if anyone gets lost, the Resilian-Elevyarian Woods are the forests that separate Resilia (pronnounced ruh-sil-li-uh) and Elevyar (pronounced uh-lev-yar). The Argent River is in the middle of it, and there is both a Resilian side and an Elevyarian side, which the river separates.

The Silver Bridge was just one of many Silver Bridges that connected the edge of the Resilian-Elevyarian Woods to the other side, crossing the Argent River that separated the two kingdoms.

Retiring as an Incompetent Queen

Fantasy · incarnadine

incarnadine

3yr

Commented

In case there's any confusion: metal is a sub-element of earth, but it's still considered a separate element! The main elements are the usual ones: water, fire, earth, and air.

It had been allegedly shaped by Metal Manipulation Specialists, the bridge railings shaped with almost painstaking intricacy. Yu Yan pitied the mages who had taken the time to etch hand-drawn floral patterns into the bridge's columns; the silver pillars that merged with the railings wove together to offer a curved shelter-like roof over the bridge-crossers' heads.