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Enyo_9753

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I wore a Mask for so long, I forgot what's beneath it. Don't mind me, I'm just trying to escape reality.

2020-09-24 Joined Germany

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Review at Chapter 74:This is a review for me and my fellow readers who may or may not like the same novels like me.First of all I have no Problem with the Update Stability, the World Background or the Story Development.I find them splendid and hope the future chapters will as entertaining or even better.The only thing i do not like is the MC.Specifically his actions towards danger.He is indeed weak and maybe naive.But thats not the issue.The issue is that despite being weak he seems to always run towards dangers that are far too much for him.For example:1. The academy gets attacked by eleves severel levels over the MC.He is traumatised and frozen in shock but while his friend helps him run away he goes back?To do what? He is weak and would have to be protected which doesnt help at all but in the end he survives.2. I know that he wants revenge but against people who can kill a whole noble estate you need to be careful.Instead he runs into their hideout and loses and survives again.I call that plot!These two circumstances show what is frustrating in this novel.You can write a weak to strong novel with a naive boy.But atleast give him some positive aspects.Like a little bit smarter so he doesnt need to be saved by plot. Brandon Chen is a Mangaka who makes Youtube and he also loves the weak to strong genre and he explains that this genre is very frustrating for readers at the beginning so you need to give the MC a few positive traits so readers dont leave at the beginning. Let him first accumulate Strenght first to reach his goals.For example at my first point: Instead of running back let him run away and let that be his motivation for growing stronger.You can show some positive by letting him be hardworking and showing that he doesnt like his weak self. In your novel it is nearly the same (It is not really fleshed out) but the running back part shows that he doesnt think about his actions.The focus is not on how hardworking he is despite only having B talent since he used a potion to get to rank 2 and i wish there put be a stronger indication that his motivation to get stronger is to avenge his dad.So what i wanted to say is that even if you write an unlikable character at the beginning that changes throughout the story he needs to have at least 1 positive aspect in his character so that people can still relate to him and wanting to read his journey till he changes.Nonetheless is this a Novel i continue to read because i see its potential and everything else is just beautiful.And that means something because i dont like weak to strong novels and i am ectremly picky with what i read.So all in all i think this is something positive.PS1: Some grammar errors every couple of chapters.Sometimes he forgets the difinite article.Especially with the word "the".PS2: If you have other opinions let me know what you think about my "rant" and discuss it in a civilized manner.PS3: What country are you from? Is English your first or second language? I find it fascinating to find no spelling errors but sometimes there is no difinite article.(I am not an English expert myself)As my last words i want to thank you because even if the novel may or may not be to my liking i find it impressive what you have created.And someday i wish to write my own novel so i hope you dont take my comment as something negative but as something that may or may not help you understand your readers minds and grow as an author.
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