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Honest Review : Writing Quality: 4*. Why ? Mistakes which is common in most pieces on this site so it's not as bad as some normally are. Update: 5* Nice and consistent so far ! This' where the low numbers come in... Story Development: 3.5*. It's a DC original story yet things are happening and aren't being explained well at all... Honestly it feels rushed, but not rushed enough. As in his interactions are poor to the story, and it's annoying too follow the weird journey with what powers he has. Character Design: 2*. And by god does it deserve such a low number ! His personality changes every 30 seconds. 'I'll kill you' 'Oh, you and your whole team and elder provoked and attacked me with the intent to kill, let me injure you, heal you and let you stomp on my pride !'. His whole schtick is him being unable to fully die and when he does die to become stronger to summarise, he should be a fucking god by now yet he still 'requests' things. I get this may be me being a prick, but I find the MC being too stupid at times and him not being arrogant enough for his power. This whole thing seems to be turning into an English version of a Chinese Martial Arts novel... <- to put it bluntly. World Background: 3.5*. It's DC yet we've seen nothing much that shows its DC or that we will get to see anything soon... the martians, cool, half the stuff in that arc were rushed and made little sense. I don't even know what's happening in these latest chapters, I'm just trying to push through and hope that when he finally gets to modern time with the JLA that he doesnt suddenly gets nerfed and becomes a bitch. Anyways this' my personal, long review hurray! Everyones entitled to their own opinion, and this' mine so yeh... Still a better read than half the shit on here.

Honestly the 3* on the Writing Quality is a dick move on my part, and it should really be 3.5 if not 4* but THE SPACING ! It's hard for me to read :(

Early review, but what I have so far ! Writing Quality : 3 *. It's not BAD, not bad by any means, in fact for 'Webnovel' it's good xD The bad thing is the spacing. People dislike reading massively dragged out paragraphs when there could be multiple smaller ones making it easier on the eyes. Stability of Update: 4 *. Good update, not much else to say but there's not many chaps and this ain't been out long enough for a consistent one. Story Development: 4 *. So far for your own original spin it's good. Won't go to into depth as once more there isn't enough chapters for a proper story :) Character Design: 3 * (Would give 3.5* if available). Pretty generic wish, though the fact that he's given a lot of information out and isn't very 'prideful' (He bends the knee to the king, which's logical but he's much more powerful) irks me. Still, this' what character development is for so this could change further on. World Background: 3 *.(Once more 3.5) Purely for the fact that it's only been 4 chapters. The world seems like a standard genre imo, which could be explained in more depth, but only 4 chapters so a lot of work still to be done. Like I've said this' a premature review thus it can change later on. All I can say is read it, give your thoughts as for something on Webnovel it's actually readable and you don't have to figure out what half of the words mean. The biggest negative is the paragraphing.

Fanfiction . Net : Normal Life? Yeah, Right https://***.fanfiction.net/s/11899729/1/Normal-Life-Yeah-Right By: Writer with bad Grammar T-T Please tell me ^^^^^ This' you and you aren't trying to play this off as your own ? Thanks :)