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Brian_Hanes_117

Brian_Hanes_117

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I like to write science fiction and fantasy stories. I am the same user as brianhanes117. For some reason, I cannot sign into that account. Feel free to check out my Infinite Domain series on Amazon.

2020-11-21 Joined Global

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Brian_Hanes_117
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neat

Soon, the king's men marched through the once formidable halls of Embercliff Citadel. The air was heavy with trepidation as they cautiously navigated the desolate chambers, each step accompanied by the echo of their own unease. The grand citadel, once a symbol of power and grandeur, now exuded an aura of death and despair. The remnants of a kingdom in turmoil lay scattered around them like ghosts of a forgotten past.

Oath of Being Temporally Yours

Oath of Being Temporally Yours

Fantasy · Han_Sirang

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The writing quality is sooooo impeccable thus far

"Looks like you've finally opened your eyes. Do you know how long I've been waiting for you?" A voice, both unfamiliar and dominant, echoed in the cold room.

The Duke's Obsession

The Duke's Obsession

Fantasy · Joshan_Jo

Brian_Hanes_117
Brian_Hanes_117
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You killed the description here too.

"Yes, the usual, Uncle Chen," I replied, my stomach already anticipating the rich flavors of his dish—a hearty bowl of Jidan Mian, egg noodles topped with his special blend of stir-fried vegetables and a soft-boiled egg, the yolk just runny enough to blend into the savory sauce.

Rogue Element [Cyberpunk]

Rogue Element [Cyberpunk]

Sci-fi · Ryker_Bale

Brian_Hanes_117
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Nice use of smell description, that isn't used enough in Webnovels.

I shook my head, the echo of his laughter chasing me into the hall. The vast space was alive with the sizzle and chatter of street food stalls. I made my way to the familiar glow of "Uncle Chen's Noodles," the scent of spices and soy a comforting embrace.

Rogue Element [Cyberpunk]

Rogue Element [Cyberpunk]

Sci-fi · Ryker_Bale

Brian_Hanes_117
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That description hit really well, as if I can envision the scene. Keep at it

The neon lights bled into the night sky, creating a twilight that never faded in Crystal City. I, Marlene, traversed its streets with my boots echoing against wet concrete. In a world where everyone was augmented or plugged in, my mere human presence was a stark anomaly.

Rogue Element [Cyberpunk]

Rogue Element [Cyberpunk]

Sci-fi · Ryker_Bale

Brian_Hanes_117
Brian_Hanes_117
Commented
Good start

As Seraphina's violin began to weave its enchanting melody, students and teachers alike were drawn to the celestial quality of her music. Her performance filled the air with a sense of wonder, and applause erupted from the crowd, confirming her reputation as a prodigious talent.

Starstruck Sonata

Starstruck Sonata

Urban · coco1193

Brian_Hanes_117
Brian_Hanes_117
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It's deplorable that he treats his sister like that

"Brother!" Dione gasped out in ragged breaths, her amber eyes wide with fear. She clawed futilely in desperation at the large hand holding her hostage. Her scalp felt as if it were being set on fire.

The Heartless Duke's Bride

The Heartless Duke's Bride

Fantasy · AvalonKing

Brian_Hanes_117
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I like the description here

The girl in front of him looked weak and pathetic. Her large, almost doll-like, amber eyes sparkled in unshed tears, and with his hand tangling in her hair to hold her in place, her blonde updo was messy and lopsided.

The Heartless Duke's Bride

The Heartless Duke's Bride

Fantasy · AvalonKing

Brian_Hanes_117
Brian_Hanes_117
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Crazy

To her astonishment, the woman indeed leaped out of the window, plunging into a river below. Vermilion rushed to the window and witnessed the woman's fall. The whole sequence of events, though brief, felt like an eternity to Vermilion. It was the first time she had felt the fear of death as a human.

Destiny Forgers

Destiny Forgers

War · TsukasaFrier

Brian_Hanes_117
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sheesh

"In this world full of wars, winning is the only right thing. Failing to win for the country means being spurned by everyone or even getting killed. They are already people without status, not even worthy of a name."

Destiny Forgers

Destiny Forgers

War · TsukasaFrier

Brian_Hanes_117
Brian_Hanes_117
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Absolutely wild

The meteor crashed onto the village, its impact wiping out all of the soldiers. The village showed no sign of life after the meteor fell. The meteor shattered, revealing an aurora-colored soul-like object, it hovered above the desolate village. It emitted a soft, ethereal glow, casting an otherworldly ambiance upon the wreckage. The object seemed to possess a strange consciousness.

Destiny Forgers

Destiny Forgers

War · TsukasaFrier

Brian_Hanes_117
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I'm sorry what? Show don't tell. If he killed the children, that was really an anti-climatic way to describe it. You need to flesh out the scenes, especially ones like that.

He gained entry and mercilessly snuffed out the lives of the two children, under the false assumption that their mother had already perished. The soldiers continued their assault on the village until all signs of life were extinguished. Night descended upon the devastated village, shrouding it in debris and the lifeless bodies of its former inhabitants.

Destiny Forgers

Destiny Forgers

War · TsukasaFrier

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