Alaster641

2yr

Replied to Faragi

... i really don't think i'll be able to write a good review... or a non critical one, i can try tomorrow, but be warned, it will most likely be extremely long. if it will really help you get more recognition, that you so rightly deserve, i'd be glad to help out. 👍 anyway goodnight. 🤗

Next time, I should ask money to have people do this for me.

Elania, Arachne in a different world [GL]

Fantasy · Faragi

if the dungeon is something that you really want in the title and her titular title, then i suggest these. dungeon Sovereign, dungeon Madame, dungeon keeper, dungeon monarch, dungeon Matriarch. if ya feel ya dunna need dungeon in the title these are my suggestions, but want her titular title. Core Queen, solitude Monarch, forgotten princess, A princess seeking respite, if ya just want a a title that suits her situation, then here's my suggestions. hope sprouts from the depths, mending a heart, severance, cultivating warmth, nourish the broken. and lastly here is some japanese length title suggestions. 🤦‍♂️ The girl trapped by a core, seeking warmth in the light.🤦‍♂️ raised by a dungeon, becoming unrivaled in might.🤦‍♂️ beating a dungeon to return home is not normal.🤦‍♂️ anyway hope any of these help with the naming, the japanese ones where jokes that i hope ya got a laugh out of. 😁👍🤗

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The Tale Of Kitsuna

Fantasy · TheRealSkollie

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

oh no... please say it ain't so. 😂🤣😂

You see, this was all a plan. A plan to make good on that promise I just gave a few seconds earlier! Hehe, if you can't go in from the front door, you can just use the backdoor!

Date or Die

Eastern · LuckyChant

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

should've aimed lower. 😈

Getting into position, I stretch my right hand as far back as I can, clenching it into a fist. From then on, I circulate my entire body with my hand as I begin pushing it forward. While breathing out the rest of the breath in my chest, I deliver a powerful punch to the large mans' stomach.

Date or Die

Eastern · LuckyChant

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

and these people just so happen to be of the female persuasion. 😋😂😭

As I begin running again I still find some time to have a little fu- I mean, I tragically continue to crash into people of course!

Date or Die

Eastern · LuckyChant

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

... i feel like this is a cop out. 😂🤣😂

LUCK: A bunch

Date or Die

Eastern · LuckyChant

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

why is it slowly turning into a spanish novel... 😵🤔😋

"Whoo!!? W-What is wrong with her!!? Circe, this is one muchacha loca!!?"(Médica español )

Date or Die

Eastern · LuckyChant

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

i really needa ask... just what is this implying. 😂🤣😂 if you take it at face value they will be rivels... if you think about it another way... we know who will be dominate in their relationship and i sense Yandere Alert. 😱😭😱

There are many things that our main protagonist is going to regret in her life, but this might be the biggest one of them all! For this was the moment when the golden lion awakened and got her fangs. Of course, she will only find out about this life-changing moment much later in life.

Date or Die

Eastern · LuckyChant

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

... feet ? what, oh well guess we will find out "next time on how to tame your friend" 😂🤣😂

ch 11 Detour

My school friend is a Lesbian and she's on to me.

LGBT+ · MixGamingDelWN

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

mother like daughter, their both bottoms. 😁😂😁😂😁

ch 10 Alone in the classroom

My school friend is a Lesbian and she's on to me.

LGBT+ · MixGamingDelWN

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

reading the Authors note and seeing your open to constructive criticism is a good thing, just keep at it and with time you'll improve. 😁👍😁

ch 0 9 Chapter 9

My school friend is a Lesbian and she's on to me.

LGBT+ · MixGamingDelWN

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

the spacing and breaking up paragraphs made this a great deal easier to read, good job. 👍👍👍

ch 0 8 Morning start for Lee

My school friend is a Lesbian and she's on to me.

LGBT+ · MixGamingDelWN

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

i take back what i said. 🤦‍♂️

Sis are you ....just saying that, Claire is part of our family not your t-!

My school friend is a Lesbian and she's on to me.

LGBT+ · MixGamingDelWN

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

sisters... right ? 🤔 i've seen worse. 😋

'Fine i was just enjoying myself, oh yeah where's Claire, is she showering?' - Elena

My school friend is a Lesbian and she's on to me.

LGBT+ · MixGamingDelWN

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

so both her parents are having affairs... or would it be better to say open relationship , if it was poly wouldn't care... but cheating disgusts me a lot. 😡 i could rant and rave about how i seriously hope Riya is only like her mom in her sexuality... 😕 however, i think i've been negative enough. 😱 i'm looking forward to seeing some actual sincerity from Riya to Lee, since right now it feels very fast, with a lack of foundation. ... hmm this seem overly negative, but i am enjoying the concept so far and hope to see many more chapters in the future. 👍😁

ch 0 7 Riya at Home

My school friend is a Lesbian and she's on to me.

LGBT+ · MixGamingDelWN

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

just found this here, dunna know if you will see it author-san, but i hope you will keep writing and not let pirating hurt you too much. 🤗 unfortunately it has become a huge issue on this site recently, so i hope you all the best on the other sites you named and i'll hopefully see you on them some time soon. 😁

ch 0 7 got stolen by 888novels without my permission

Sweet Revenge Of A Nerd

Teen · Authormoon

Alaster641

2yr

Commented

so our mc is going to continue to consider herself male, inside a female body...🤔 while i hate the trope, at least you've given an interesting reason for it. 👍 that and Alice seems to really be looking forward to her future prospects in the looks department or rather "mountain" department. 😂🤣😂 just one thing... she has two moms ??? 🤔 sorry for the rant. 😁😂😭😱

Even then, for generations, they have been met with disappointment. All children born from our house have never had a gender different from our parents whose last name we inherit.