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To be honest, I’ve enjoyed this so far. I don’t know if I can say the same for the future, but the pacing of the story is definitely really nice. Also, I can see why many reviews find this dissatisfying. It’s because of the influence of many overrated novels where all there is is the main character getting laid every chapter. I used to think the same for my first 2 novels, however, after that, it gets sickening when you think how much story/plot progression there can be compensated if not for the ***-filler pages.

Lol just because he has a mental age of 20 doesn’t mean he is invulnerable from insanity and psychological disorders and traumas, such as PTSD. It is also the plot of the story that he overcomes that.

What novel ideas are you thinking of that is being mashed together? Also, it seems like you have yet to read much of the story except for just the beginning, which is quite unidealistic to claim that there is no development in his personality, and why he is given the lucky chance he is given. Quite a hasty review. It seems like you have mistaken this for like a system-type novel. The previous review also suggests your lack of taste in a proper, slow, and progressive story.

First few chapters when the main character is a mosquito are well written, but as it progresses into his first humanoid, the development becomes somewhat forced. The main character’s actions feel a bit too unnatural for his moralities unless there are some more elaborations to his actions because all until now, he’s been acting in a way to maintain his cold persona while there isn’t much clear reasons or details to why. It somewhat eased after his duel, but it still feels a bit too fast, especially on how the speed of his evolution does not complement his interactions with the world. Compared to his first interactions with humans, although not direct, is quite hesistant while his later interactions with humans seem a bit too “toxic,” if that is the right word. It’s like he took a complete turn in his moralities, which is understandable after the Mauling, but doesn’t make up for most of it because it only mentions how he have become more mentally challenged than morally challenged, like his interaction with Lily and the human who dueled him. It highlights that he is not morally challenged while his interactions with the mercenary group with Merelyn emphasize how it is quite right to kill despite not having any conflicts, or intimidations. The writing style is quite unique, I guess, the confusing part about the dialogues is the “Me” part. I think it would be better with “I said,” or otherwise emphasize it in third person through using the person’s name than in first person. Releases are slow, but stable, so there is not much problem with that currently. The characters are well-made except for the main character, but also not really. The main character just lacks awareness of his own moralities and philosophy, or otherwise, does not express it consistently. It’s like he has a split personality. The story is quite young, so there isn’t much expectations for the structural world, but the story exceeds it so far. It might change through-out the story, and to be honest, although it has some flaws, it is still a lot better than the overrated, “My Vampire System,” or it shouldn’t be compared with in the first place because it is like comparing trash with goods.