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just add the Harem Tag, so people like me who don't like it don't need to read a bunch of chapters just to be dissapointed with the way you do things. I have the impression that it is just bait at this point. especially consdering that webnovel doesn't have a no Harem Tag

I am currently reading chapter 35 and i felt the urge to write a revew, so here i am. I love the way you merged snapes and anikins personality. one can clearly perceive both of their traits in the mc. Your grammar is, as far as I as a non native speaker can judge, flawless. A typo every few chapters, but who cares. The Idea in it self is realy interresting and I cant whait to see how he integrates jedi techniques into modern magic. The only things that annoy me are his, in my oppinion, way to fast change in the looks department (Snape in the books was ugly, and after a few weeks of training he is described as some sort of prince?) and him growing a buisness empire in a few weeks. For everyone who understands even a little bit about buisness stuff that is just cringe. Even if you have a prototype, binging new produkts on the market can take jears. A portable computer in the 70s ? Way to unrealistic, considering most of the hardware making something like that possible wasn't even invented jet. A simple cRT screen without any computing power could weight 30 kg and more back then, and that is without batterys.

yea. Coudn't read past " i got died after..." and that is literary the first sentence.

The writing quality is ok. I mean better than normal translation fanfic's and readable without hedaches. I like the charakter desing, definitely something new and unique and the powers the mc recives fit well in the concept. A few of the skills are a little bit too op for my taste and make it seem a bit forced. I mean, there is nothing wrong with op skills, but a *100 multiplicator for a level 2 character without doing anithing special is a bit much. Make him op when he reaches lvl 100 and has accumulated a few achievements. dont give him skills equivalent to or even better than momongas " the goal of all live is death " from the beginning. At least that is my opinion.