Webnovel Author: Champi_07 - Novel Collection

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Hello... again. I have decided that I will write a review of each chapter. As of chapter two I would like to say that I am very displeased on this scene, you are an extremely talented author but yet your work is a bit disappointing, you used ' Ancient and Godly turtle' way to may times I understand that Akash was going to call him 'Ancient turtle' but this is a fearful and all knowing beast, so you using the name Godly and ancient really was disappointing, you used those two names way to much, and with the fear and amazement in Akash I feel as if you could have expressed it more, I didn't really feel or see what you were trying to express throughout the trembling Akash, and with the turtle there was no emotion or expression or really any important detail, this is an old and wise turtle I definitely would've enjoyed seeing how you would come out and express him when talking to Akash, I definitely have more to say but I'll leave it at that.

Hello. I was very cautious about if I should write a review or not but after reading some of it... I would like to say, that so far this has been very interesting, I have only read the first chapter, however I do plan to read more as I would like to see how your story develops I must say well done to the author I was very intrigued by your introduction but I am a little disappointed I would've liked to see more details on the beast, I feel as if this beast should have been described a little better, you are wanting to make this beast magnificent and fearful, but you didn't really get down to the imagination of what this beast should look like, I feel as if you missed out on some details. Now with Akash I feel you could've made his arrival more grand, you could've expressed his feelings more, you speed up his departure and arrival to quickly, I was disappointed as such a talented author as you missed such important details, I definitely would've enjoyed seeing this tragic yet mysterious picture come together as you see it, but other then that fantastic job I can't wait to read more!