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A fine choice: dam-father. As a life-span human behavioral specialist, I am admittedly in favour of functional behaviour - not gender - as worthy descriptors of a character’s role. Your story-telling style and your delightful approach to enlightening your readers is truly appreciated! DAG of DAGseesTrue

Author LivChanin is absoluty correct. ‘Bribe’ is definitely funnier! Looking forward to reading more of your brilliantly funny writing! DAG

Lol LivChanin! “Percolating” is such a perfect process-word for you! It suits your writing style as it’s so much more action-packed and oh! (bad pun alert!) - and it’s just so dang ”perky”!

Dear LivChanin, Thank you for letting us know that you need to pause for a bit to reflect on Derek and Layla and all those who love them in Maybe Mine. I can’t speak for others, but I will wait joyfully because I know that giving yourself permission to pause and ponder without the pressure to produce is a sign of wisdom! Frankly, even when writing non-fiction, I find that when I try to force the words to come, I’m bound to tangle myself up. So I tend to walk away and rather than think about what I am struggling to say, I do semi-mindless things like washing clothes or doing the dishes or my best bit: sleeping on it! So many times my best words have appeared when I am not thinking about anything in particular or when I just wake up. I have taken to calling my walking-away process “gestating”, and who knows? It may work for you, too! Also, I want you to know that you should feel free to use any thoughts or words I share because sharing in the arts helps artists create even more art! Oh, and here’s a one-liner I say (even to myself, lol): ”I reserve the right to revise and resubmit.” DAG

Before I forget, Layla needs to know her rights re: Brody’s harrassment and then Brody needs to get whapped upside his head with a legal restraining order!

I began reading Talons some time ago, but let it lie fallow for some months because Shen YeChi’s plot development feels like a tapestry is being woven by a true artist. Author Shen’s character development is so beautifully rendered, I can’t help but feel like her characters are real-for-real(!) human beings - persons that I wonder about, worry about, and care for as if they were true friends and family members. In particular, I admire the way in which Shen YeChi illustrates her deeply flawed character Colton in such a way that I’m convinced he can only spiral downward into madness and destruction, but no! Author Shen gives Colton the gifts of self-reflection, insight, and shame, and Shen gives us gifts of ompassion and hope as we witness Colton’s painful growth in care and concern for the also-flawed young genius Rhea aka Brain aka Baby B(ird) Talons. I shake my head in awe and admiration as I wish and hope for many more chapters to come (soon)! DAG

Dear Shenyechi, Thank you for clarifying your word choice (rupture) as it regards baby Lady’s emerging first teeth. I agree that the word (rupture) is quite effective in expressing this poor infant’s acute pain and suffering and thus is likely to be the most powerful way to “paint the picture” and to elicit your readers’ empathy! Masterful work - and special thanks for your noteworthy care and concern for your youngest character - as well as for us, your readers!

I think you mean to say that baby Lady’s teeth are soon to erupt (break through the gums; appear from below the surface). To rupture would mean that little Lady’s teeth will break or disintegrate.

See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule