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Replied to Arkinslize

by the way I'm rlly loving the novel thanks for offering this masterpiece for free

A third individual, Jake's size and typical Middle Eastern physique, but who could just as easily have been from North Africa, or any other country, looked sinister in stark contrast to the ecstatic looks of the fornicators around him. He seemed resentful of the whole earth and ready to fight at the first opportunity. Yet he continued to scrub himself meticulously with plant soap, ignoring the debauchery rampant all around him.

The Oracle Paths

Sci-fi · Arkinslize

Lazered

2yr

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no thats not what I mean, I'm not blabbering on it being reductive or whatever just that idk what it means bc I rlly don't understand.. it let me think of anything with the way u describe it it's like saying 'it was a yellow day' like ok I guess the day was yellow but what does that tell me? but like I said before maybe I misunderstood and u mean to say 'face'rather than physique? perhaps that would make sense bc if u say American physique I might think fat so that is obvious, but for others like 'african ' or 'middle Eastern' I can't think of physiques associated with those 😅

A third individual, Jake's size and typical Middle Eastern physique, but who could just as easily have been from North Africa, or any other country, looked sinister in stark contrast to the ecstatic looks of the fornicators around him. He seemed resentful of the whole earth and ready to fight at the first opportunity. Yet he continued to scrub himself meticulously with plant soap, ignoring the debauchery rampant all around him.

The Oracle Paths

Sci-fi · Arkinslize

Lazered

2yr

Commented

I have a feeling he'll cheat his way through life to become at the top. that would be interesting

Jake later realized that he might pay for his years of cheating on virtual reality games today. Karma knew how to choose its moment. And when it did, it was a real bitch.

The Oracle Paths

Sci-fi · Arkinslize

Lazered

2yr

Commented

I've been wondering tho but what do 'middle Eastern physique' or 'african physique' etc mean?? is that just their face or their body structure, if it'd the first then the wording is a little off it gets me confused

A third individual, Jake's size and typical Middle Eastern physique, but who could just as easily have been from North Africa, or any other country, looked sinister in stark contrast to the ecstatic looks of the fornicators around him. He seemed resentful of the whole earth and ready to fight at the first opportunity. Yet he continued to scrub himself meticulously with plant soap, ignoring the debauchery rampant all around him.

The Oracle Paths

Sci-fi · Arkinslize

Lazered

2yr

Replied to Haplo484

I agree but tbh I think it might make the author lazy with a intricate plot (where things can just be excused as luck lol)

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Civilization

Fantasy · DaoistZqipHd

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2yr

Replied to Deeran

I'm very late but like the other person said, since the comma isn't placed correctly, it is hard to tell, but im 101% sure it means that the 'mystical' place is so grand it cannot compare to something (so small in comparison) like the pyramids

"We are in a mystical place." Klea pointed upward and added, "Look up there, there are floating islands and houses in the sky. They couldn't compare to the pyramids our mighty pharaohs built."

Earth's Greatest Magus

Fantasy · Avan

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2yr

Commented

i think i read somewhere u like grammar checks, so uh. this is 6 months old, yes. it is a tiny tiny error, yes. but 'hers' can never have an apostrophe (her'is) - otherwise your saying '..was somehow even more disturbing that her is' (which doesn't make sense)! Remember that for the future!

"Well, then you're in luck. Meet me after school and I will explain everything to you, partner," he said, with a smile that was somehow even more disturbing than her's.

The Great Demon System

Fantasy · Drip

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2yr

Replied to Aheva

it's like those stories where someone gets reincarnated from earth and tries implement earth's technology. it just feels good to have something from 'home'

When he was reborn on earth, he thought of many plans, but because he did not have the strength, in the end, none of his plans were carried out. But now it's different.

Returning To The Cultivation World Through A Game

Eastern · Saubi1234

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2yr

Replied to Ahmad_Shahzad_7339

hmm or maybe the actual game is loading a REAL World ... 😳

The large number of visitors to the website causes the process of opening the site to be very slow.

Returning To The Cultivation World Through A Game

Eastern · Saubi1234

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2yr

Replied to SeaOfMadness

its a small plothole which probably won't be solved, but i think the story wont be set in other countries in that case? if the author actually manages to find a solution to this without limiting the setting i will be surprised

"You are not immune to church attacks, what you have in your room is just a normal item. The items used by the church are blessed by the Pope himself, the closest figure to god we have in this world."

My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.

Fantasy · Victor_Weismann

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2yr

Replied to Happy_Person_8656

lool your right, before i edited it i think it said 3rd or something and i forgot, thanks for giving me a heads up! When i release the next chapter I'll also edit this paragraph

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Azvloć; Overseer of Totality

Fantasy · Lazered

Lazered

2yr

Replied to dysplex

big deep yees

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Azvloć; Overseer of Totality

Fantasy · Lazered

Lazered

2yr

Replied to Happy_Person_8656

I'm glad you see it that way! Also, fur future reference, what part of the dialogues weren't as good as it could have been? Was it the style or the emotions(or lack thereof) evoked, or is it something else? Thanks for the review :)

Azvloć; Overseer of Totality

Fantasy · Lazered

Lazered

2yr

Replied to dysplex

bc of how long he lived, obviously he's not human anymore. It turns out the during that process he evolved to another being (think of it as a 'higher human'.) As the novel progresses, higher stages = higher level cap, higher age limit, etc..