Webnovel Author: MayDreamer - Novel Collection

The young security guard sneered. He said, "Who doesn't know Kevin's gang beats you up once every few days for ridiculous reasons? Why don't you fight back?"

MayDreamer

1yr

Commented

Haha congrats you got Iskeai!!

"Okay. This kid looks better than me… but I don't look like this!"

A teen's pale face with gray eyes and shoulder-length silver hair stared back at him. He wore a gray t-shirt with a black hoodie. His ear piercings and a red ruby necklace were the only uncommon things on him.

I Also Level Up

Anime & Comics · Mister_Overpowered

MayDreamer

1yr

Replied to AstroU_1

Thanks but I wanted a review in my new book "Winter Rain" not in this one😅

Irene The Lady Who Turned Down Fate

Fantasy · MayDreamer

MayDreamer

1yr

Replied to prajnya_shriyan

Thanks for the review~

Winter Rain

LGBT+ · MayDreamer

MayDreamer

1yr

Posted

Honestly after reading this novel, I feel like I am not capable enough to review it, everything about it is perfect, except for the long para that you can break into smaller para. The story setting, the foreshadowing, the character design, the world building and the suspense is on a whole another level. Seriously till now this is the best Sc-fi novel I have ever read! I am extremely excited to know further about who the real villain is Julia or Thomas ( I just have my doubts on him😉) Also there are some scenes that I found a bit confusing and I have already mentioned them in the comments. Last but not the least, Good Work Author!! Your work really made my day today!

Modern Society

Sci-fi · AstroU_1

MayDreamer

1yr

Commented

Heath, Julia and Thomas are brothers...but I have my doubts on Thomas rather than on Julia

``Can I ask, how do you know Heath?`` Eden asked. ``His my younger brother.`` the man replied as he continued kicking the rock. ``So who is your older brother?`` Eden asked. ``Oh him, his name his Julia....`` but before he could finish, a large circular portal emerged out of nowhere. Then suddenly Eden felt a strong gravitational pulling him towards the portal. He wanted to resist but the force was to strong. ``Before I go,, tell me who did this!?`` Eden asked with a loud voice. ``It is Julia...``

Modern Society

Sci-fi · AstroU_1

MayDreamer

1yr

Commented

Here Eden is looking for his parents and friend, so using "Where are you" would be better as using "Look at Me" makes it sound like they can't see Eden...which I believe is not the real scenario.

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Modern Society

Sci-fi · AstroU_1

MayDreamer

1yr

Commented

"Someone she tell him about heath" This line confuses me...

``That new kid... he is something else.`` Elliot said with a soft voice. ``Someone she tell him about Heath.`` he added. Elliot`s words hit Regina hard. ``What is wrong with him`` Regina asked. ``He is an air of the Harrison Family and our class rep. Does that not say something!?`` Elliot replied. ``Just keep quiet if you have nothing to say!! Regina said as she rolled her eyes. BEEEEEEPPPP... ``Attention sorry for this interruption, Eden Davies please come to the office with your school back.`` the intercom said as it grabbed everyone`s attention. ``What did you do. Did you get in trouble`` one of the learners jokingly asked. ``I do not know!`` he replied with a confused look on his face.