Webnovel Author: Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to haremphobic

Oh, so I should've gone into more detail on what exactly the difference between normal sight and how he sees with mana is?

Anchor-1: Using all of the user's mana, an anchor point can be set up, allowing the user to teleport to that point from anywhere. Costs 50 mana to teleport to an Anchor. (0/2) Anchors placed. {Reach Rank 'Intermediate' to level up skill}]

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to haremphobic

I *see*, thanks for the criticism man, I really appreciate it. I can see a lot of that definitely being true, since I decided to switch to the real life powers and military stuff on a whim and just happened to have had lines setting it up earlier. The only thing I'd hard disagree on is me needing to restate he's using mana to see during his first mission. I'd just spent the last 20 chapters specifying that lol everytime he sees something. To the point where I actually thought it was annoyingly redundant while rereading. Thanks for your honesty though, I love all the other folks reading here but they aren't the critical type, always nice getting blunt feedback.

Anchor-1: Using all of the user's mana, an anchor point can be set up, allowing the user to teleport to that point from anywhere. Costs 50 mana to teleport to an Anchor. (0/2) Anchors placed. {Reach Rank 'Intermediate' to level up skill}]

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to haremphobic

If you don't mind, could I get more elaboration on when "toward the end" was and how exactly my writing was starting to falter? I'm always trying to improve!

Anchor-1: Using all of the user's mana, an anchor point can be set up, allowing the user to teleport to that point from anywhere. Costs 50 mana to teleport to an Anchor. (0/2) Anchors placed. {Reach Rank 'Intermediate' to level up skill}]

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to haremphobic

Oh my bad, I meant the story as a whole, at least up to the end of Volume 1. This was my first time writing something long-ish.

Anchor-1: Using all of the user's mana, an anchor point can be set up, allowing the user to teleport to that point from anywhere. Costs 50 mana to teleport to an Anchor. (0/2) Anchors placed. {Reach Rank 'Intermediate' to level up skill}]

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to haremphobic

I appreciate it man, aside from the fact I gave up and only gave an outline of the ending, what did you think of it?

Anchor-1: Using all of the user's mana, an anchor point can be set up, allowing the user to teleport to that point from anywhere. Costs 50 mana to teleport to an Anchor. (0/2) Anchors placed. {Reach Rank 'Intermediate' to level up skill}]

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to haremphobic

I mean, I half finished the ending 🥲 I'm just arguing with for the sake of arguing though, I agree with your criticism tbh

Anchor-1: Using all of the user's mana, an anchor point can be set up, allowing the user to teleport to that point from anywhere. Costs 50 mana to teleport to an Anchor. (0/2) Anchors placed. {Reach Rank 'Intermediate' to level up skill}]

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to IceBlizzard

Thanks for coming back for my pseudo ending. We had some good times together eh 🥲

ch 38 How I would've finished the story, Pt 5 Finale

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to haremphobic

I get that, but the I've made it clear people don't even know what the class does, the only info I've said they've gotten is it's a high cost low damage build. They're frequently surprised Kane is teleporting. We only see Kane hang out for about a week in the game with maybe 4 characters. I do agree that my explanation is a bit weak though, its always bugged me that I couldn't find a better to justify it, but in the end it doesn't effect any payoffs so meh

Anchor-1: Using all of the user's mana, an anchor point can be set up, allowing the user to teleport to that point from anywhere. Costs 50 mana to teleport to an Anchor. (0/2) Anchors placed. {Reach Rank 'Intermediate' to level up skill}]

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to haremphobic

The idea is more that not enough time has passed for people to realize it's good, the class is advertised as high cost limited attack, which would be bad early game. The very first players on Skyrim didn't immediately go for stealth arching :P

Anchor-1: Using all of the user's mana, an anchor point can be set up, allowing the user to teleport to that point from anywhere. Costs 50 mana to teleport to an Anchor. (0/2) Anchors placed. {Reach Rank 'Intermediate' to level up skill}]

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to NeedToRead

I've put out 5 chapters covering the direction I planned to go in and the series ending, hope you'll enjoy!

ch 31 Kidding

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to IceBlizzard

Verrrrry late, but just in case you don't get notified, I've put out 5 chapters to cover the direction the story would've gone in, as well as the ending (albeit shallowly). I hope you'll like it!

ch 34 New Story: Update

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to PatriarchFireWall

Might be late to say this, but I've released 5 chapters summing up the direction I was planning on taking the story. A bit lazy, but I'm sure you guys would rather have some kind of ending than nothing at all!

ch 34 New Story: Update

Eyes of Ember

War · Want_A_Martini

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Commented

"There's a back room where no one goes," Carly said. They dragged Arthur to another room. There was no problem in doing that inside the pool, but someone could appear at any moment. And these girls did not want a quick fuck. They wanted Arthur to destroy them.

Picking up Girls With My System

Fantasy · Ryongul

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Commented

This is giving me an aneurysm

"Not we, but you. I pulled up some strings, and you're now a new chef for the Royal Family,"

Picking up Girls With My System

Fantasy · Ryongul

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Replied to ironyisnotdead

And how does he know how to control his temperature or flame size

Arthur controlled the flame to keep a steady temperature throughout the process. The book said the best temperature for each stage, and Arthur did not want to change that. He needed a lot of knowledge in the field to change these sorts of aspects. Trying to cut the root from one ingredient was already bold enough.

Picking up Girls With My System

Fantasy · Ryongul

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Commented

Aww don't lampshade, acknowledging you're lazy doesn't fix it

"Universe is truly helping me out here." Smiling, he returned to the classroom.

Picking up Girls With My System

Fantasy · Ryongul

Want_A_Martini

1yr

Commented

So he went to summer camps and learned a bit about hunting but didn't/only knew how to make a friction fire from TV?

Another thing he wished to master was hunting. Arthur was not entirely clueless about it, as he went to some summer camps back in his world. But the problem was that few animals lived in the academy's woods. And, as far as Arthur knew, no one could hunt there.