Webnovel Author: Itsurbff_who_reads - Novel Collection

This story is well developed and written well. It has a good story concept and character build. The MC definitely has a realistic personality that most books don’t have. I love the ethnicity that you show with her being Spanish. You don’t see that in many books, it’s definitely a fresh outlook on a character. The world building is great, it’s the real world so of course. There are a few grammer mistakes but overall this book is great! I hope you get somewhere in writing and keep updating! I can’t wait for the next update!

The storyline seems good, as does the plot. The world building is unique but I have seen this concept a few times. There has been slight development in the story which is good. Character design is great, the basic character personality is displayed. Overall this story is good. Though the first chapter is bland and the grammar and punctuation need fixing. Also maybe try giving your character a realistic personality rather than a happy or determined one, that has been seen in protagonists a lot. Good book though.

Thank you!

Thank you!

This book is good. It has a good plot yet lacks many things. There needs to be less author notes in the middle of the story, it is rather annoying. Maybe also fix some grammatical mistakes. I’d advice grammerly. Try adding more of the setting so we can imagine where it is taking place. The character design is interesting keep it up. Overall it’s good, just needs polishing.

Thank you! Bestow friendooo Yuji-kun!