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No. He has knowledge, but he does not have too much power. He actually struggled against Sirius, and against the african leader too. Within the power system you have set up, he is not op. View More
Harry Potter and The Loa's Child · C96
1 day ago
Have never seen such a forced situation in any novel on this platform. Poor writing. View More
Spectacular spider Man (The side effects) · C1
4 days ago
What happened with that monster village that they made friends at? Didn't they promise to go back to see their friends? Their dog friend was going to have a fight for something important right? What happend to that part of the story? View More
Golden Fox with System · C53
4 days ago
So 99% of the time he is going to just be sitting on an infinitely growing pile of points? Points that can only be used once per level on a single technique? Obviously the price of the techniques goes up with the rank, but if he continuously generates points eventually he will have a ridiculous ammoint of points that he cant spend. There will simply not be enough demand for the supply. He has the points, but is so restricted on the supply, that there is no point for him to aquire more points to spend. I get that the progression of your Mc is based on his effort, but why give him a system that will not push his demand for its use? He could get the techniques without the system, so what is the use for the system? Its your novel, you have every right to write the way you wish. Thanks for answering my previous questions and responding to so many others. I'm glad that you at least put in the effort to interact with your readers. View More

T0XIN: that's the whole point. they're only useful once every level up. And no, there's no cap

Gaara · C12
5 days ago
Patriotism should definitely be patronage. Unless you were wanting them to show spirit for their home countries and having him thank them for that...

If thats the case, I may need to read the chapter again... View More
The Strongest Businessman · C145
6 days ago

SpringGrassAvenger: I'm not sick, I'm twisted. Sick implies I can be cured.

-best quotes of 2019

Dragonborn Saga · C395
6 days ago

Song_of_FieryIce: Dylan deserves to have such a good brother! So touching 😭

The Strongest Businessman · C101
1 week ago
I feel that you have restricted the shop far too much. Opening the shop once per level is fine, but only a single purchase as well? He will continuously be building up points yes? What is the point in having a shop with a point system then? Why not let him just have a single technique per level from the currently available ones? Feel free to ignore me, but from my perspective your point system is useless as it stands currently. Unless you find another way to spend those points, there will never really be a use for them except once every level up. Is there a lvl cap? View More
Gaara · C12
1 week ago
#1 Stop listening to us.

#2 No harem. Ever. There is nothing worse than a douchy scumbag mc who has 15 different lovers and treats literally all of them as meat puppets. The writing around most authors harems is literally crap. I can only think of one harem that has good writing and that is E.P.I.C.

#3 Put a cap on everything(or just some things) in his unlimited world to keep him from becoming too strong too fast. Like no unlimited adamantium or vibranium untill his strength rises he can only get up to an ounce of each metal. Or he can get any plant, but there are respawn times that get shorter as he gets stronger. You already put a limit on the library so you might want to ballance out the personal world too.

#4 Start his journey a few years earlier so that he has more time to prepare, taking the softcap into account.

#5 You could give him a function in the library that lets him see his current status (dont remember if you already did this or if it was in another fanfic with the library as part of it) no levels or anything, but current skills, knowledge, and physical/mental stats like how much ki he has or his current health stat.

#6 No harem.

#7 Stop listening to us.

#8 Dont listen to us unless we are saying NO HAREM.
Seriously, since your a newer author, writing a harem is a lot to put yourself through. Harems go 1 of 2 ways. They either work well or go really really really really wrong. The stats to both are like 10% go well while 90% cause an author to drop the novel or just restart then drop like 5 chapters in because they still tried to write a harem.

#9 Keep his mom, but perhaps make her a little less dependant on her child. Unconditional love needs nothing more than to be unconditional.

#10 Remember this at all times:

THIS IS YOUR NOVEL.

I said not to listen to us, but that is likely never going to happen(feedback and all that), so remember that we are not the ones who write the story. If we have an idea you like, go for it, but do not put any pressure on yourself to incorperate everything we want.
Have fun writing your novel. View More
Ascending the Heavens in Marvel · C20
1 week ago

Bibon: The story you have here is good. The only thing that i might change if it was me was have him being born 6 to 8 years earlier with some kind of job that will force him to get involved with Carol and what not but the mother doing so is also a good thing.

I think the only other change i might make is with the world he has maybe not give him unlimited resources so quickly. And this change could even be installed into the story as is cause here is my thoughts. Have them be unlimited however, it requires a respawn time the only thing that is truely unlimited would be the spiritual energy.

And of course even with an unlimited amount of it without the time and hard work it is impossible gain a lot of power. With this you impart this into the story as is becuase its not like he has yet to pull enough resources to hit the soft cap much less even notice that there is a limited unlimited number if that makes sense.

The system of power i personally dont know much about having never read Desolate Era my self but i have read enough Cultivation stories to have an idea of it.

A good way to ballance the powers if you need is have there be other people cultivating also for instance Iron Fist could be considered one same with Dr Strange honestly. The shield agents are aswell just that they are pretty much pure body users and limited at that. Iron man well he is a different power system but has a similar effect even more so when he gets into the nanotechnology versions of the suit (given you add that in).

Infact now that i think about a lot of marvels characters could be considered cultivators in one way or another just that there methods are not as good as the Mcs and that also dont have access to the Energy he does.

Oh that just gave me a crazy thought. What if his personal world leaks a small amount of spiritual energy into the world around him un noticeable by anyone that starts to revive the spiritual energy of the planet which might power up some of the users of magic and other such energy?

Just a few thoughts of mine Do what you will with them.

Ascending the Heavens in Marvel · C20
1 week ago
Good chapter! Literally cant wait for more! View More
The Fastest Man Alive - Marvel · C17
1 week ago
The whole pepper pots things took up most of my thinking when writing that post. Did not bother going back and checking, so it slipped my mind. Whoops. But the rest of my post still stands. View More

Clown_Of_God: man, have you never stop to read "the gamer"??? his with are to have "the abilities of the gamer"...do not need to say another word and everybody will know what that power

Marvel Reborn · C1
1 week ago
Shouldn't the weight be a lot more? The zoldicks front gate is supposed to be several tonnes right? The ant king has easily more than 100x 150kgs of strength. At the very least hundreds of tonnes. I think you are underestimating the power of some of these figures. View More
Rebirth in hunter x hunter · C5
1 week ago
Hmmmm, widower of recently deceased mother on the doorstep was not quite the supprise I had expected....


Thanks for the chapter. View More
Harry Potter and the Fortunate Queen · C49
1 week ago
I know I said I would read the rest last chapter, but I cant seem to get through this very well. Your original theme was great, I just feel like there is too much missing from the storylines perspective. Its like your trying to make him the greatest most recognized hero ever, but no one even knows who he is yet. Thats the kind of disconnect I am getting from this. He somehow has a system, like a fully fleshed out system with a store, points, and statuses, that he did not wish for, and I am left feeling that there is a lot that I have missed.

Good luck on your fanfic author. Adios. View More
Marvel Reborn · C2
2 weeks ago
Woth was meant to be 'with' View More

Li_Cangtian: The thing with pepper potts is, quite honetly, ridiculous. It just comes out of nowhere, like literally nowhere. Also where did his system come from? He did not wish for a system, yet he has one?

I would recommend fixing your wishes. If he is going to have a system, make him wish for a system. If he is going to be pepper potts long lost brother, make him wish for it woth the extra wishes every month. Dont just tack on a random bit of backstory that literally makes no sense given the wishes already made. If he is pepper's brother, would that make her a high destro too? how did he become that completely different race if she is not? Why would he be at the center of the planet if he was born on the surface? Who put him there? Why? Is there an unseen mastermind behind his wishes?

I would honestly just scrap the part about being pepper's brother. Someone with lucifers powers does not need connections.

I will read the rest of your current work, but I hope that it becomes less disjointed as we read on. Feel free to ignore me too, I am pointing out things I find too odd in the hopes that you are able to see one of your plot points in a different perspective. No offense is meant.

Marvel Reborn · C1
2 weeks ago
The thing with pepper potts is, quite honetly, ridiculous. It just comes out of nowhere, like literally nowhere. Also where did his system come from? He did not wish for a system, yet he has one?

I would recommend fixing your wishes. If he is going to have a system, make him wish for a system. If he is going to be pepper potts long lost brother, make him wish for it woth the extra wishes every month. Dont just tack on a random bit of backstory that literally makes no sense given the wishes already made. If he is pepper's brother, would that make her a high destro too? how did he become that completely different race if she is not? Why would he be at the center of the planet if he was born on the surface? Who put him there? Why? Is there an unseen mastermind behind his wishes?

I would honestly just scrap the part about being pepper's brother. Someone with lucifers powers does not need connections.

I will read the rest of your current work, but I hope that it becomes less disjointed as we read on. Feel free to ignore me too, I am pointing out things I find too odd in the hopes that you are able to see one of your plot points in a different perspective. No offense is meant. View More
Marvel Reborn · C1
2 weeks ago
If the people at quidian were not a bunch of self promoting jerks, this novel would be No.1 hands down. (Except for maybe EPIC, but that is the only exception) View More
Dragonborn Saga · C389
2 weeks ago
Probably dads new gf. View More
Harry Potter and the Fortunate Queen · C48
2 weeks ago
Seriously, with the penalty of DEATH, one would think that the Mc would do that first. I'm hoping it was just not mentioned and when the author listed the 30 points he had, the author actually meant 20. View More

K1ra12066099: Why doesn’t he pay off his debt already

Reborn with the Ultimate Weapon! · C5
2 weeks ago
Reading Status: C12
My No.1 recommendation for you is to condense your chapters. Even if it seems like your release schedule becomes less, the longer chapters will let readers get more involved with your story. As it is now, its sort of like reading a paragraph, then having to flip the page for the next paragraph (each page has only one paragraph)(in the current case there at least 3-5 paragraphs per chapter). It does not seem like a huge deal, but it has more of an effect than you would think.

No.2 recommendation would be to have a more solid plan before you start writing. In the synopsis for your story, you wrote something like "I don't know if I should give him a system or just place him in the world or even as an already cannon character" (paraphrasing)

DO NOT LET US WRITE YOUR NOVEL

This is where most authors get burnt out. They listen to their readers too much. Have your own plan first, then see if we have any ideas. Do Not, I repeat, DO NOT LET US WRITE YOUR NOVEL. Your the author for a reason, if you like a suggestion, by all means, use it, but don't base your plot off of what we want.

Grammar is fine. View More
Reborn Into Star Wars
2 weeks ago
Same. View More

MashiroSymphony: Interesting. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Reincarnated as Theodore Nott with The Magic System · C1
2 weeks ago

MashiroSymphony: Interesting. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Reincarnated as Theodore Nott with The Magic System · C1
2 weeks ago
Guess either his laptop broke again, or he really died this time. View More
The Pirate Djinn · C28
2 weeks ago
Please never drop this!!!!! View More

Gray_stone3: It’s Not. I don’t really like harems that much, they ruin the story most of the time.

The Speedster with The System · C2
2 weeks ago
Reading Status: C0
2 chapters in and already on Hiatus?

No, I dont think this will go far.

Hopefully the author proves me wrong, but at this point, there is almost nothing to go off of. View More
Ultimate Batman In Marvel [Hiatus]
2 weeks ago
Need more! Thanks for the chapter! View More
Spending My Retirement In A Game · C137
2 weeks ago
Thanks for the chapter! View More
RWBY Re: Jaune Arc · C46
2 weeks ago
I will literally read this novel for only this conment. I just said a while ago, harems are literally in every other novel on this site. Bravo for writing what you want to and not getting influenced by your readers. By all means, listen to comments, but dont let us write your novel. Gonna start reading now. View More

Vallori: Unfortunately no. I kind of lost my interest in harems so this story will have just a normal relationship between 2 people.

Nothing But Overpowered
2 weeks ago

Vallori: Unfortunately no. I kind of lost my interest in harems so this story will have just a normal relationship between 2 people.

Nothing But Overpowered
2 weeks ago
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