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Apprentice4

1yr

Posted

The novel undoubtedly has a great premise and the way author writes makes you even more curious about the story. Although there are numerous grammatical mistakes that make it hard to focus on reading, it's getting better in the latter chapters. Kudos Author!

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History · _hazel_black

Apprentice4

1yr

Posted

I love how the author is slowly fleshing his characters out. There's no rush, no clear-cut boundaries, and no hurried introductions that don't make sense. Although the grammar needs to be tended to, it is still something tht doesn't hamper the reading experience. Good job here

[BL] Blood Lifeline

LGBT+ · yohan26_

Apprentice4

1yr

Replied to OnizukaShinu

You can delete all of these comments of mine then bruv if you've made changes

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Replied to OnizukaShinu

no worries man, just keep doing what you're doing and keep tryin new things. Grammar and word choice and word order'll get better with time

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Replied to OSM_1015

'the' girl makes it sound like a title, you can rather use sth like 'vilian, a young girl'

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My Tempting Book Lover and I

Fantasy · OSM_1015

Apprentice4

1yr

Posted

So, I'll divide this review in pros and cons. Pros: -Author has an interesting concept going for him, especially in terms of MCs power and his hidden identity. it would simultaneously make a great slice of life and action novel -The familiar school setting makes it easier to relate to -It's worth it to pass time, especially when it's hard to predict the happenings Cons -The author's perspective is inconsistent, some lines are written in the past while some in the present, some active and some passive, though nothing that good editing can't fix. -The choice of words could also have been better but again that'll automatically get better with time. What's important here is keep experimenting, keep doing new things with it, try to create something completely original. As for the problems with language, they'll get better with time. All the best!

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Commented

"Mere mortal dares to interrupt my sacred time!" She said full-on loud to my face.

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Commented

use acquire instead of purchase

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Commented

but after taking so many hits*

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Commented

physique instead of physics

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Commented

eye-movements

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Commented

it makes my vision "magnified" instead of larger*

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Commented

remove 'a' before dazzling and space between my and self

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Action · OnizukaShinu

Apprentice4

1yr

Posted

Author uses vivid and clear description that makes the novel look like a piece of art. Of course, this style still has a lot of scope for growth but I believe this writing will keep getting refined as time passes. I especially like how the characters are revealed so slowly and carefully and aren't one dimensional at all. Moreover, the flow of the story alone makes it a worthwhile reading. Good job, author-kun.

My Tempting Book Lover and I

Fantasy · OSM_1015

Apprentice4

1yr

Commented

Vilian the girl sounds a bit odd

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My Tempting Book Lover and I

Fantasy · OSM_1015

Apprentice4

1yr

Replied to PsychoPlayah

The Huntress of Silvermore

Fantasy · Apprentice4

Apprentice4

1yr

Posted

Author here. The Huntress of Silvermore follows a relatively slow pace and is written from a first-person POV. Ask for any questions related to the updating schedule or the characters and the plot in the replies. Thanks you reading this😊

The Huntress of Silvermore

Fantasy · Apprentice4

Apprentice4

1yr

Commented

Yoo you forgot Jing and Jiang, too many MCs with those titles

"Those with the surname Xiao, Ye, Chu, Lin, Fang, Su, Lu, Li, Chen… or those with the name Aotian, Liangchen, and Ritian are basically not to be trifled with. They usually have great luck.

I Am Such An Expert; Why Do I Have To Take In Disciples

Eastern · Wood Easily Starts Fires

Apprentice4

2yr

Replied to CelestialAlcoholic

Thanks man, also sorry for the messup, appreciate your comments

From the second layer, each step they took was marked by a horrible stretch and an eerie sound of their corpses being crushed to death. The marks of fighting on the walls on either side also told them how frustrated the person who did all that must be.

Timeless Celestial's Odyssey

Fantasy · Apprentice4

Apprentice4

2yr

Replied to CelestialAlcoholic

There's a twist with it✨

From the second layer, each step they took was marked by a horrible stretch and an eerie sound of their corpses being crushed to death. The marks of fighting on the walls on either side also told them how frustrated the person who did all that must be.

Timeless Celestial's Odyssey

Fantasy · Apprentice4

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