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a boy reincarnate in the world of onepiece with the power to control system
all character except for OC belongs to their creators..
If you like story great, if you dont like it still thanks for reading my beginner work.. first time writing anything original aside from college lecture notes and exams writing.
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1. Beginner writing
2. Bad grammar - english is my 3rd language
3. Bad story development- story is just written in free time i mean i write 3 chpters today
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I would like to introduce the girls in One Piece, and if any of the girls I proposed have the same place as yours, then I'm sorry. girls who want to propose Alvida Baby 5 Belo Betty Black Maria Carrot Charlotte Custard Charlotte Pudding Charlotte Smoothie Domino Ginrummy Gion Hina Hiramera Ishilly Jewelry Bonney Kalifa Kaya Koala Kozuki Hiyori Makino Mero Mikita Monet Perona Porche Raki Sadie Sarahebi Shalria Shyarly Speed Stussy Sugar (draft is not a child as in the original) Tashigi Ulti Wanda White Bay Yamato Zala Character that is Kuja (not including Boa Hancock because I will include it in another topic instead) Aphelandra Kikyo Marguerite Poppy The character is the princess in the story. Nefertari Vivi Rebecca Shirahoshi Vinsmoke Reiju Viola The character who is the queen in the story Boa Hancock Kinderella Mororon Characters from the movie and from various special episodes in the story. Ain Ann Baccarat Carina Carmen Desire Guarana Honey Queen Nightin (not old) Olive
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Empecé a ller con expectativas bajas, que es como se deben leer los FF por lo que al notar que es decente y había una nota del autor pidiendo una reseña ya sea buena o mala solo para no ver un 0 estrellas que lo ponía incomodo, vine a hacer esta reseña. Dice que el inglés es su tercer idioma, pero yo que leo con el traductor de Google no tengo tantos problemas por lo que no debe de estar tan mal, ya que con pequeños errores en la gramática el traductor se vuelve loco, sinceramente mientras de acá en adelante la calidad se mantenga para mi esta bien 👍🏻
It started like all one piece fanfics, since nothing starts out perfect, the protagonist is the typical one who wants to live quietly accompanied by any girls he meets by his sight, then comes the demerit of the story (where he gives Buggy a system, using the excuse that he is taking advantage of, while the protagonist olgasanea and is just having fun), not to mention that until chapter 10, I was hoping that the protagonist changes and stops being lazy, but no, now he became a secondary character that just waits for the points to come to it (it's so frustrating), there is no development, among other things.