"Pietro Maximoff.", Pietro answered with a chuckle, "So what's your superpower, besides the 'I-am-handsome-and-I-don't-give-a-damn'-charm?"
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says the yapper king himself
"You always that noisy?", I couldn't help but ask, though I kinda enjoyed his light-hearted attitude.
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yeah nobody.... stares back at people..? it's a common rule of... the place where that doesn't happen... I guess
Still, Ellie shared her excitement partly, as anyone that could do what he had just done, was definitely someone abnormal.
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authors playing with the trigger
And while Laura's eyes were filled with challenge and aggression, his seemed to burn with something that Ellie couldn't decipher, though it was no less intense than Laura's gaze.
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good news, if LilLogan is the love interest then it works out as a duo with the mc, the mc is a non-physical fighter and she's strictly physical, covers eachothers blind spots fairly well and further cements the fact we won't have to deal with a bunch of working out or martial arts
Ellie couldn't help it, as Laura Kinney was simply unpredictable and that made her dangerous.
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so a voice that.... sounds... good? this is so specific idek what kind of voice you could possibly be trying to describe.
"Hungry?", a voice like warm honey with a tea spoon of whiskey, sounded out – incrediby smooth with a slight rasp.
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this is what we're spending our time doing btw
The intensity of her gaze was something I had never encountered before, but I imagined that it was similar to a wild wolf locking gazes with his potential prey, trying to find any weakness or a chance to attack.
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oh pffff as if we're going to have some omega level mutant with mind powers learning "punch" and "kick" with his time.
"Can't argue with that, though unfortunately not all of us are blessed with a mind shield. Anyway, since you have plans to train in the gym, you should join my combat class. I may consider teaching you some tricks to defend yourself, even without your fancy barriers.", Logan said.
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they aren't when you never shut up, honestly he just yaps so much i don't think we need to be a telepath to read his thoughts
"Thankfully not, I like my thoughts being exactly that – mine."
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fancy way of saying trust no one but sure go off king
I really wished Xavier's motives to be pure like he said, but I knew better. The Professor, no matter how kind-hearted, had his own goals and ambitions, and as they say 'never trust a man with ambitions, as you can't be sure how deep his obsessions runs'.
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this is not the behaviour of someone who "pays back their debts" its the behaviour of someone obsessed with the image of being that type of person. the school is getting access to an omega level mutant, his probable assistance in the event of an emergency, his information about mutations if he feels like giving any out, on and on and on. the mc is receiving less from this deal than professor is and he's just adding rent on? this line should just be deleted from the novel, it makes it feel more like the mc has an ego and wants to be seen as benevolent to all these pathetic mutants that are beneath him rather than him just being some honest guy who doesn't like being indebted.
"Yes, I am gonna pay rent."
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you know I think I like the personality of the mc but it's hard to tell because it's written like it's supposed to be some theatre play.
"Well, I know that you teach the children here in hopes that they could rejoin society as normal people, to coexist with humans by blending in with them. I have no such goals, Professor."
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no not clearly, we've spent more time on this non-relationship than anything else so far
Though I have to admit, that like every human being I also enjoyed companionship, but I was also clear on my priorities for the moment.
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she's okay looking and you know nothing about her, why are we pretending either of them would have any interest in eachother?
His small remark would have made any other hormonal teenager rather excited as Jean was an incredible beauty and having her interest was probably every teenagers wet dream.
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dude half the people here are probably staring at the new guy let alone catching glances, she sounds like the least interested person on the flight. also this is an issue some fanfictions have, so far the only thing we know about Jean is that she's connected to the xmen and just blushes over any guy she thinks is handsome. I doubt this author is using this scene to set up some sort of relationship with the mc but people are cringing because some do and it's gross, her first action as a human in the story is just to puff up the ego of the mc and nothing else.
Still, Jean caught herself stealing glances at him the whole and rather short flight.
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so... bland and forgettable? I've opened this reply box and already forgot what that guy looked like besides "basic".
Looking at the handsome teen before her, whose wild curly hair gave him a carefree charm, she couldn't help but be curious about him, as she couldn't hear his thoughts.
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she only really seems to be liked by fanfiction authors, its a combination of her sort of "edgy personality" and the generally lacklustre dialogue of xmen movies.
It was easy enough to strap myself in, though while doing so, I did catch Jean looking at me with a bit of suprise and a small frown on her face.
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it feels like the author just writes the previous line to have wolverine pat his protagonist on the back. think about it like the author writing and fanfiction and then having the marvel characters say stuff like "omg have you heard about [author name] he's such a good writer" except this example is a little more on the nose. maybe the auth didn't intend to use it this way but alot of shallow compliments like this are going to come across like that and it feels cringe
"Smart kid.", Wolverine commented.
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never give information away for free in this sort of situation, I guess it's his way of explaining the portal but he should've atleast been pressed before giving it up
"My name is Elijah Frost and I am the one you came looking for, though the Ancient One was faster and decided to help me out."
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I'm just gonna skim through while he's still being a chatty kid, it feels super out of character and I'm guessing the auth just didn't know how else to introduce people so I won't let it hold down the novel too much
ch 11 Chapter 011 – Companions
The Wanderer - A X-Men Crossover Fan-Fiction
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