Emblemas 37
Moments 3429
lol I thought that a Potato God was about to sprout, angry at being used as a metaphor for being stupid 😂
"Damn it! Are you looking down on me! Do you want a fight?" The sky suddenly appeared a faint lightening, as if the weather was about to change.
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Will she free those bound beasts soon? Those guards have been sleeping for ages now 🤔
After she dealt with the problem here, and help the five beasts, she will return to the Divine Kunlun sect and prepare for the secret realm with her brother.
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Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Honestly she seems to feel that way about every man she meets 😅 Must be an amazing place.. sigh
Staring at the man's face, this man was the most beautiful man she had ever seen in her life. She couldn't describe his picturesque beauty by words.
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot
See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule
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The Prime Minister’s Darling
General · Pian Fangfang
Bite -> bit Shook -> shake
"Hell is empty and all the devils are here....what are you waiting for…" The shadow kissed her neck and bite her ear. When the shadow appeared, the aesthetic red space seemed to shook slightly as if everything here felt the terror power from the black shadow.
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Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Panic -> panicked tear blood, it has never stopped falling -> blood tears, they never stopped falling
"Yue'er..." His voice choked, he couldn't say anything more because he was extremely panic now, and he didn't know what to do. No matter how he wiped her tear blood, it has never stopped falling.
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot
“How misery Yue’er heart was that result her tears turned to blood?” This sentence is confusing. Perhaps something more like, “How miserable was Yue’ers heart that her tears turned to blood?” “…torment, he felt difficult to breathe.” Grammatical errors. Perhaps, “…torment. He found it difficult to breathe.” Or, “…torment and he found breathing suddenly difficult.”
How misery Yue'er heart was that result her tears turned to blood? Lin Yin Zhu's heart was throbbing in torment, he felt difficult to breathe.
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Previous and previous. Maybe a synonym for one?
For her, they have to suffer again and again. She knew that all of her previous memories in the previous life were erased. Father and brother wanted her to live safely and carefree while they carried all the heavy burdens.
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Fantasy · Littlecarrot
‘Because of the outnumbered, the overpower people with rakshasa masks…’ makes no sense 😅 Try something like, “They were outnumbered. The overpowered people with …” ‘Blew himself’ -> “blew himself up” (blew himself has a very different meaning 😳)
Because of the outnumbered, the overpower people with rakshasa masks kept appearing. The battles continued until the man exhausted his last spiritual power to push the woman away and blew himself with the group of people in rakshasa masks.
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Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Reluctance -> reluctant
Lin Yin Zhu's heart was suffocated. He was afraid to see her reluctance expression to accept him, but he knew that if she was really his Yue'er, she will not let him down.
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Will she -> did she Disgusting -> disgusted
Will she feel disgust with his ugly appearance and mortal body now? Will she feel disgusting when he kissed her?
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot
The eyes -> eyes What are her eyes colour now? -> what colour are her eyes now? What expression is she looking at him now? -> ‘What was her expression when she looked at him?’ Or, ‘When she looked at him now, what was her expression/what expression did she use?’
Unfortunately, he didn't have the eyes to look at her now. What does she look like? What are her eyes color now? What expression is she looking at him now? Is she happy, knowing that he was her brother?
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot
The consciousness -> consciousness *Just a tip, you tend to overuse “the” quite a lot. Most of the time, no article is required at all and you can skip right to the noun. Other times you could modify the noun with ‘/an/a’ instead. You can even mix things up by using a pronoun eg “her consciousness.” Definite article, “The”: Use “the” with a specific or particular noun, a previously mentioned noun, or a unique noun. Eg ‘The book I read was funny’. There are loads of books but the specific one I mention is the funny one. Indefinite article, “A,an”: Use “a” or “an” with a singular, countable noun that is non-specific. Eg ‘I read a book’ gives no specific details yet, it’s just a random book atm.
He regained the consciousness when he got to drink her blood. And because his soul recognizes her, that's why he wanted to be with her to make up for the tragedy of that year. He misses her so much.
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Her disgusting -> a disgusted
He was relieved when she didn't show her disgusting expression after she learned that he was her brother because he had kissed her that night. He was extremely relieved that she didn't mind.
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Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Felt into the deep sleep -> fell into a deep sleep.
"One soul went to another planet called Earth. And the other soul was born here. It's just that, the soul that was born here was extremely weak. That's why, some evil spirit took the advantage to control over Yue'er's body resulting Yue'er's soul felt into the deep sleep." He explained cautiously, afraid that the girl cannot accept this sudden information.
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Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Problem -> problems Unbelievably in -> unbelievable it Listened -> listen ✌🏻
This sentence saved her problem a lot. At this time, no matter how unbelievably in sounded, she decided to calm herself down and listened to every single word carefully.
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Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Ohhhhh 🤔
"First, let's talk about Yue'er's origin. Yue'er, you're not from earth nor belong here. When Yue'er's strength was strong enough, brother will bring Yue'er back to our place."
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Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Seemed -> seeming
"Yue'er don't panic. Listen to brother first." Seemed to feel her messy mood, Lin Yin Zhu hurriedly came forward to embrace her.
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Fantasy · Littlecarrot
Her unbelievable -> a disbelieving
"How is this possible!" Seeing this scene, Huang Ying Yue suddenly exclaimed with her unbelievable expression.
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot
This Phoenix is adorably sweet. It’s like he’s having his first Christmas 😂
"Yoi!!! The spiritual water! Not a pond but an enormous spiritual waterfall and fairy water! Help!! This phoenix is going to faint!" FengHuang patted his beating heart.
Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road
Fantasy · Littlecarrot