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John Smith an unlucky guy, with a brother who is way to lucky, embarks on a virtual journey to find the meaning of his life while crafting.
Special thanks to Java that works as the Editor of this novel
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-- การจัดอันดับด้วยพลัง 
-- หินพลัง คุณอาจชอบ
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- คุณภาพของการแปล
- ความเสถียรของการอัปเดต
- การดำเนินเรื่อง
- กาสร้างตัวละคร
- พื้นหลังโลก
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I don’t even know what’s going on, the writing is so bad. It at least has an Interesting premise though. The book has an obvious non native english speaking author. No world background (that I could tell) and if there was any character development in the dialogue then I couldn’t tell. I think the titan character race could do with being a bit more unique besides just “imagine a man... but big..” but that’s just a nitpick. If the author gets better at English or gets an editor that doesn’t mind all the work it would entail to edit this then this honestly would be a good story I think. We need more crafting stories overall.
just read it. it's amazing. 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters 140characters
haha this was the best novel I can wait and read me self into its fun it has good story line and many good characters especially scrappy nice boot
I just found this story tonight, and the first few chapters were such a Turn OFF. THE TUTORIAL TAUGHT NOTHING, JUST PISSED ME OFF. SHOULD CHANGE THE NAME OF THE STORY TO ONLINE DUNGEONMASTER, which would be more inline with the actual story, not this DECEPTIVE NAME IT HAS NOW.
I really hate this story, it doesn't make any sense for example the best vr company make game with tutorial that don't teach any thing mc get bad titles from tutorials because he can't make good items, it have ai that don't help any how just tch , he see world boss in beginner area and he kill it with luck but story say he have bad luck, like how? Kill the crafter after making some beginner item? It doesn't make any sense, he make item that break the game and game company say he come for deal What is this game? Just for grave and shovel he obliterate a dungeon? IF YOU WANT A STORY THAT MAKE SENSE DO NOT READ I REPEAT DO NOT READ
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Dropped You know why. A lot of people left valid criticism yet you never respond to them. -----------------------------------------------------------------------
Congrats, there aren't enough words to describe how annoying reading this thing was...you attempted a story good job but damn...I had hope when he met the blacksmith but no...you kill him, give him some OP thing, take it away and give him some random thing that is basically pointless at this stage...excellent my friend excellent
It a novel full of potential and is very original There are many things that can be improved like the Je got if the chapter but it coming along pretty well.
Was very fun to read and I enjoyed the story. Great work.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
honestly, I got lost in the 3rd chapter, after he got dissed by EVA and made that trash coin pouch, I just couldn't continue after that, the 'flavor' of the writing was a little off for me too
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All hail Scrappy the best and only god in the kingdoms. I need more Scrappy and I neep Scrappy to reconnect with John again before the war starts
This story definitely has it’s moments. The first few chapters were a bit sluggish to wade through, but it’s passable. Most of my negative experience from this is a run on sentence or laughably unedited chapters. There are some definite highlights within here, but it is locked behind some content that most would stop at. Should give this a read if you have seen your fair share of some pretty sluggish intros. -Spoilers!- The most egregious of the unedited chapters is when Chrome attacks the starting city. In chapter 38 - Unaltered quote from this scene, “ charged forward in a soeed thatvwasn’t seen yet and their jumping abilities and used them and their fearlessness to jump ...” This scene instantly broke any semblance of immersion I had . I would definitely recommend either a proofreader, grammerly, or an editor. -Spoiler end!- In the end, this is a decent novel that has a sluggish start and needs a editor of some kind to fix some basic problems. Probably will stop reading at chapter 62 as the author put some pretty obvious soon to be romance into the thing. But that’s just personal preference. Not meant to be rude to the author or anything, but some proofreading will help the novel a lot.
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Seems to me that you have a pretty nice list of things that should happen to the MC. But you don’t really have much to connect it and make it flow. Ex. You created and killed a character in 2-3 chapters just to give John his cheat. For other readers, this should be a read for those who just want to see a Op character screwing around with common sense. Purely for comedy and fun laughs
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1 love this one it was me dieing laughing, already recommended to a few friends, hope the creator has other books...........................
How to start this .... Well, when you try to go for comedy but you ain't funny your novel doesn't have much left. The novel's pace is faster than eminem's rap, but it's actually good because there's barely any content. Nothing is explored, the thing is completely unrealistic and I'm talking about the basic function of the game amd the people.... It's just cringe and boring.
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I love this book I think it is great and should have more updates. I love the MC with all he does and can’t wait to see what else happens.
Really good balance. Can use some improvement but is a great story otherwise! I wish it updated more however. The story is nerdy enough for me to follow and understand while not being super specific on detail work. It makes it very easy to imagine what is happening as you read.
Poor unlucky John...the last of his family, his brother, died and all he's left with are the massive debts his parents left behind. His brother has also left him with a special edition capsule for latest VRMMO. While he envisioned them playing together, at he's given John the tools to hopefully pull himself out of the gole and create his own legend! Um....did we mention our hapless MC is unlucky?? Qhat ensues is hilarity as he builds his own legend in-game!