BLUE FLAMES

LV 13

shacochan

Review for a read until chapter 8. I will never understand the appeal of systems for readers nor what motivates authors to purposefully go against the core of story writing. Putting Grammer and my bias aside, there are unsalvageable mistakes that makes the read unpleasant. The prologue is not catchy at all. It simply follows the bland current of a river mechanically that I can't fathom to understand. It's too normal, too peaceful, too nothing. I want something exci ING or thought provoking that makes we want to read the next chapter, ignoring the small scale of them. The characters are, well, I can't give my opinion on them because I wasn't given the chance to meet them. Who is the Mc and why am I following him in the journey? Not a shred of personality, monologue or otherwise. It makes or breaks a story. The world is never described. Vague mentions of them aren't enough. Making them too detailed is undeniably tedious and unnecessary, I understand, but a middle ground must be found else leave the readers confused. What does the magic school look like, is it hogwards like or modern campus like? What is the buses color, the street, is the sky normal or is green light the norm? I have no idea because they were never briefly touched on. The pace needs to be be slowed down with these corrections. I hope you get better at writing.