The First Store System

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pinaka_

Since, I've already uploaded more than 300 chapters, I think, it's time for me to add another review. The Writing Quality is for the readers to decide, so I'll say nothing about it. For the story development, sometime it's slow paced and sometimes it flows normally. Unlike the other store stories, this story starts at the peak of a dimension, so from the get go, the store has been getting strong and known characters. Aakesh, is our MC, who wants to find put about his past, and the system helps him just do that by completing quests. He's a character who has a nonchalant attitude for everyone and everything except his cat, Lily, who is just as chaotic and destructive as a cat. There'll be no romance in the story, so the question of Harem doesn't arise. I update two chapters daily, and for extra chapters, I've announced the goals in the Synopsis. As for the World Background, It's a Multiverse, that is seperated into four dimensions. MC is starting from the weakest dimension. There are countless races like Elves, Dwarves, Orcs, etc. If you still don't like what you read from the review, then go read the book, and if you like what you read from review, then I don't think, I need to tell you what to do.

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Deathy_70

It's a good novel, really nice with no romance I've seen too many. of them it's unique and the mc calm and collected, hehehe but that girl is honestly getting annoying sigh.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

LV 1

Nakirium_Supplier

Writing? Readable Story? Good Character? MC is a SIMP (to his Cat) and Lily the Cat is irritating that its disqusting There no problem other than MC and his Cat, but I will not read paragraph that has the word Cat or Lily

LV 10

Kurdi123

He simpt Maria for already a few chapters giving her all space rings of the people he killed without a good reason. At first I give it another Rewiew with 3,4 Star but then a few chapters later he is still a Trash ....oh I mean Trash simp

LV 10

_Jo1Jo2Jo3Kurdi_

First the Cat is annoying... Second the Author's Deva to extremely Op fetish is unnecessary. And the reason number 3 is that its little boring. (And for God's sake or for you for Devas sake please stop the i, ii,iii... and no. for number, number = is Nr.)

LV 11

Ashton_A

Woulda gave it 5 starts but he simps so hard FOR HIS PET CAT and lily is so annoying, maria is just cancer in evey chapter shes in, feels completely forced and she should clearly understand he dont give half a f about her and she starts liking him once she learns hes strong before he did anything to help her. Everything else is great but those 2 were enough to stop me from reading

LV 13

Incognito0001

Solid writing quality but cant say its 5 stars, beginning seems more like a prologue showing what mc will become in the future and then jumps around here and there which seems somewhat unnecessary and somewhat poorly done imo, the one thing that I hate about books is inconsistency and plot holes and there are already some appearing in the first 20 chapters that discourages me from giving this book more of my time. I usually like the OP store owner/system books but I find it hard to like this one. Might check it in future but for now 3.4 stars is me being generous :/ my rating might seem harsh but I am comparing it to books that actually have 4.8+ rating and are not inflated like your book currently is

LV 10

Kurdi123

If it was without lily then+1 And I dont like World background with Deva are Op. and there are few other things that I dont find good.......

LV 1

DaoistD4bpsi

Hi, my name is José, and I'm from Brazil, and I wanted to tell you that this story is AMAZING and I'm completely addicted to it, you're doing a great job, I'm looking forward to the next chapters, greetings (sorry for the english, it was for the google translator)

LV 5

Thee_AngryBird

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LV 13

Mr_N00B

So far I am loving this one. It's got good potential . I am aso a great fan of store based novel. And this one has new taste and different from previous same genre novel. Give it a try.

LV 14

iAmTheStrongest

Ive only read 15 chapters so far but im liking it! To me, its a refreshing read. Id recommend to all. The quality of writting is also High.… Just have a read

LV 10

Smart_Monkey

I've read up to the latest chapter and I've loved the book until now. What I like most about this book is the mystery surrounding the MC. I've never seen the system treating the MC the way it treats him in this book. Great work, Author!

LV 2

ArchMage

Man this novel so good I makes me wanna shoot the author for slow updates you! yes you the one reading this go and read the NOVEL........it's good so far I readed all the chapters expect privilege ones (I'm poor af) and the story is pretty awesome.

LV 4

Darius_Chromwell

I may not necessarily like this story but i do somewhat like the comedy.

LV 15

Diegoa

So, far the story is unique and is not like other Store systems. So right now tye story is good and it has a lot of potential. I expect to be more amazed when there is more chapter and keep doing a Good Work!👍👍👍👍👍

LV 4

ShaDow1

author i have read 150 chapters i like your story but there are few topics that are annoying like the restrictions that the system has put on Mc that he only have to sell 3 pills per day and his arrogance that have reached heaven. i mean he doesn't have the attitude that a Shop Owner should have. like he should have maintained a good relationship with the king so that king would advertise your shop and mc would have more customers in early stage chapteras

LV 3

VaporaFire

Neutral review here any spoiler after ch 266? or whatever significant happened next. I already got bored reading this, feel like its getting redundant. Its like showing us how big is the multiverse and iits dimensions but then telling us how big planet earth is :/ And what's with virtual portal world thing? Is it important plot wise for future chapters? This is better it there are more fight scenes with mc outside the shop and not telling us that expressionless face. I know that his goal is to find info about himself from the system by doing the shop missions. That Wine immortal system is better than this story wise.

LV 12

GrInfo

I’ve read more than 800 chapters, and so I have caught up. Good points: -There is a good number of interesting side characters who has a nice chapter or a few to them. (Author forgets some however. That girl Princess with the 1 eye, and is looking for revenge against against the organization. The guy who has a vendetta against an organization, and the Bisan kingdom/empire for selling his territory, leading to his tribes deaths. The prince of the Holy Empire. The moon elf politics, and the sunlight elf conflict between siblings. These are just some.) -The writing quality is good, and the updates is good. (Small errors with the numbers, and powers don’t make sense always.) -There are more good points. Bad points: -Lily is so annoying. I don’t read 80% of the writing involving her. -I’m fine with arrogant characters but the MC, and Lily is to arrogant or rather they are hypocrites. “The weak should act weak” is what Lily says several times but they keep acting stuck up in front of beings far above them, and are so rude but dislikes rude people. -The side characters, and the world is really like +90% of the reason I’m still reading. I skip half the training arcs, and Panagea because we don’t see anyone of them again other than knowing that they are going stronger. The characters in Panagea we never meet again the next arc. -I get that the MC doesn’t care to be a shop owner but why are you writing a novel that is mainly about him being a shop owner. He’s to shameless, and you wrote that the system also is against him blackmailing, and stealing but he scoffs at that. Have the MC become less shameless because it gets so difficult to read whenever that happens. -MC does not have moral issues, and believes he is better than everyone else... that’s fine but that doesn’t mean you have to write him to be so rude. He’s not scared of death... that’s fine but what about torture of Lily because of what he did? Is he scared now? -Writing that Lily is cute, and has a childlike voice does not mean she’s cute. -I don’t care if the MC is not a good person, I like villains (MC is not a villain) more but not when they are 3rd rate villains or so arrogant for no reason. I like smart, humble (arrogant but knows when to be humble or thankful) but still can be very cruel, and uncaring for the misery for others type of villain. Overall, Author, you don’t have to change the character personalities but decrease the training time writing. Hopefully you decrease Lily’s writing time also, and increase the writing for the customers.