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sent dumbles first clear the worst of it bet grindolwald gets a free pass as only one harry doesn't have anything against

this story keeps getting better only question is can you top this?

Is it just me or does this remind you of shadow hack

has this been dropped

omg the suspense is killing me i can not wait what a bloody brilliant idea

loving the story but wouldn't the army fix any illiteracy problems and if he made it to colonel i really doubt he would still be a virgin other than that loving this well written piece hope you keep up the good work thank you

grammar's much better not perfect but at least now the story mostly makes sense

is your grammar getting worse or is it just me hard to make sense of it don't call him Mr peter its just peter instead of its in your head should be its in your hair

he has a lot of mp but how dose he stack up against the likes of dumbles or voldie

save people while looking like a terrorist ??? shouldn't it be looking like a hero?

Great tale thank you I really enjoyed it

Could you remember clearly something that happened 150 years ago I cranberry remember last week

The author has slowly been getting better at story telling as he goes on with this tale who knows if he keeps practicing we may eventually have another token on our hands wouldn't that be great

usually when the mc gets near to this power level the story starts to go stale it gets boring and seems like the author is slowly losing inspiration/interest this dose not seem to be the case here i am glad to say hope you can keep up the current standard or even improve loving the story ......a fan

loving the nod to terry pratchet

well said if a man had done half of what herd did he would be serving time

loving the story could use an editor to catch the errors help with the flow of the story but on the whole a great job loving it