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A story that started well and then descended to the core of the earth. People only accept and congratulate this type of script due to a pure lack of neurons. The author wrote a script as leaky as a sieve and this part involving Danzou is pathetic and totally AU. The MC's family in this script is completely expendable; the MC would not need to demonstrate all of Tobirama's characteristics to become important in the war, an example is Kakashi in the third war; I don't know how crazy the authors are to give such absurd and exaggerated prominence to MC's when at that moment it is clearly impossible or there are many disadvantages in doing so, especially in nesaa fanfic as there is still the third war that lasted at least 5~8 years; the false importance of family and/or friends in the lives of the protagonists is disgusting (this fanfic is an example), they are only there to serve a small part of the pathetic script, in the case of this fanfic the MC doesn't even truly care about them, he he only has contact with his friends on their initiative and not the MC; the false virtue is another irritating thing, the MC is not a good son/brother, his actions show that he doesn't really care about anyone, so when he does something it is merely the author's will.

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I use Google Translate so if you don't understand something, you can ask me and I'll explain or I'll try to express myself better.

Author, I recommend only 3 women as a limit. It will be extremely complicated for narrative and writing if you add more than that. In a harem with many women, it is common for several chapters to be off-screen, only occasionally shown as if it were an object. I humbly ask this, I know the narrative will get VERY complicated. I'm not commenting on this because I don't like the harem tag, but because it's a difficult tag to execute well in the script. The only chance for a harem with 5~10 girls to work is if you put slife of life to introduce them, otherwise they will have the same development and appearances as Max with double or triple the number of chapters since his introduction in the story.

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I'm saying that this fanfic was supposed to be your 5th success because the premise of 5 of your fanfics (including this one) are very good, but you poorly developed the plot of 4 of them and you're close to failing with this one too. And honestly it seems to me that you are making a mistake on purpose. I'm using google translator...

Author, please tell me the formula on how to consciously reject being in the top 30~50 fanfics with powers stones. You let the chance pass you by 4 times, 5 with this one.

Man, that was extremely forced, this plot is so pathetic that anyone with two brain cells knows the mistakes. Danzo showing mastery in Fuinjutsu greater than Mito and Kushina (two Uzumaki), and even the poisons he has are more lethal than Chiyo of Sunagakure. This is so absurdly pathetic that I have no words to describe it. If you did these things above to make things worse, it's a matter of time, so author, edit these chapters and eliminate this "plot". It doesn't make any sense, this plot is so bad that it's on the same level as a lazy Chinese party fanatic.