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what is "the compound of section B"? Perhaps use "The Section B Compound"?
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"If I had a better..." -> "If I had better"
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appears to be a run-on sentence. suggest "as better psyon..." -> "since better psyon"
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missing end punctuation
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missing end punctuation
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missing end punctuation, suggest comma
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view paragraph comments, put changes there
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wakened -> weakened
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shuder -> shudder
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แฟนตาซี · Entrail_JI
Its just unreadable. The original world background sounded somewhat interesting, with another "reincarnation to try again" genre. With this big of a cheat, the MC is guaranteed to do very well already. Except the 10,000X Upgrade System makes the main character so absurdly powerful that after 5 chapters the MC is a literal one man army able to slay gods. There are no meaningful side characters. There are no meaningful antagonists. The main character trumps everything by virtue of existing.
Tribe: I Become Invincible With My 10,000x Bonus From The Start
แฟนตาซี · Strange Human